Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days the population of india is getting higher and higher and some how the constructions also build in larger amount in metro cities so its better to make tall apartmentents rather than build homes i highly agree with this view.

To begin with , homes carry a huage amount of space which is not good for future world apart from this those who are intersted to make their buiesness for instance groceery shops , footwears etc . so conseqently they construct their home in 3 floor of building so they save the space and have both the living lives carrier as well as family.

furthermore, the indian population of journals shows the data between 100 people can live together in 1 bigger and taller buildings so we can follow their pathways and consider in good way .according to them there is no any disrupttion form between the people in 21 sentuary the lifestyle of people are getting subseqently in modern type as well as there are many facilities are there for example faster eleveter so the people can reach their destination sooner ,moden roof gardening , rooftop gyms so people can utilize the space of their apartments and live privillegely in tiny amount of space and save the constuctions of buildings by their surrroundings.

To conclude with their are many ways in this 21 sentury and modernlifestyle with AI world to save the space in metrocities for future populations with using different gedgets and tools and artastics brain in some extextent can build the tall apartments .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear in the opening and conclusion: you strongly support tall apartment buildings as a way to save space. You also give relevant points, including combining homes with shops and using facilities such as rooftop gardens and gyms. However, the response addresses the question only partially because these points are not fully explained or supported. The claim that “100 people can live together” in one building is unclear, and the reference to population data does not identify a source or explain how it supports your argument. Develop two or three reasons with specific examples, and explain why apartment blocks provide enough homes more effectively than other approaches.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “furthermore” and “To conclude” help show the intended structure. However, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from land use to shops and then to family life without clearly connecting these points. The second combines population figures, social disruption, lifts and rooftop facilities in one long sequence. Some linking phrases are mechanical, and references such as “according to them” have no clear antecedent. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then use clear explanations and examples to connect its supporting details.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to urban housing, including “metro cities,” “apartment,” “facilities,” “rooftop gyms” and “utilize the space.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “apartmentents,” “huage,” “disrupttion” and “artastics brain.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unclear, including “population of journals” and “live privillegely in tiny amount of space.” Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; prefer precise phrases such as “urban population,” “high-rise apartments” and “make efficient use of land.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “apart from this” and “so,” and you use some simple sentence patterns to state your view. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so readers must work to identify the relationships between ideas. Errors include missing or incorrect articles and plurals, as in “in 1 bigger and taller buildings,” and problems with agreement and sentence construction, such as “the lifestyle of people are getting.” Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas using accurate clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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