Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary era, there are only way to provide enough homes for individuals in rural areas is to manufacture tall apartments blocks as compare to build raw houses. I largely agree with this point, businesses should have to invest more in tall buildings it is very convenient for everyone to afford this.

To begin with, in large cities there's no enough space for peoples as many general groups are moving there so it is very hard for anyone to found houses in the big areas. As a result many humans has to suffer to find a place where they will live. moreover the certain solution is only to manufacture tall blocks as it takes place in many benefits such as environmental , bonding.

Moving towards, in many villages there are not a single apartments because everyone has to live separately as they want privacy but it is opposite in urban areas mankind are move their for their jobs as well as for their studies if someone is looking for a raw houses first it is very high in cost secondly it is a very rare chance that they found a separate place for their desire living. in this phase people has to adjust many things. it is also very beneficial for individuals to move in an apartment there are many peoples they meet and they make a good bond with each other as many peoples are supportive.

Overall, I totally agree with this point, there are only one way to provide enough house for a family as well as students because there are many peoples who are willing to shift in urban areas as many humans are already there so it impact on our environment . Moreover the consequence that many people will face is consisted area there much traffic because of the roads are very small.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is broadly clear: you say you “largely agree” and later “totally agree,” and you give relevant reasons, including limited urban space and the cost and scarcity of separate houses. However, the response only partially develops the question of whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. The discussion of “bonding” and privacy is not clearly connected to housing supply, and the final point about traffic and small roads is introduced without explaining how it affects your view. The reference to rural areas and villages also shifts attention away from the large-city focus. To strengthen the response, explain how high-rise construction increases housing capacity and compare it with at least one alternative, supporting each main point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is some organisation, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “Overall” signal stages in the essay. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph moves from lack of space to environmental benefits and social bonding, while the next shifts between village life, urban jobs, house prices and friendship. Some links are unclear or mechanical, including “Moving towards,” and the conclusion adds traffic without connecting it to the argument developed earlier. Improve cohesion by giving each body paragraph one central claim, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence. Use linking expressions only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas, and make references such as “this point” or “it” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “tall apartment blocks,” “privacy,” “urban areas” and “environment,” and you try to express ideas about affordability and community. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts of the argument difficult to understand. For example, “manufacture tall blocks” is not the usual collocation for constructing buildings, “raw houses” does not clearly convey the intended meaning, and “consisted area” is unclear. Repeated use of “many peoples” and “humans” also reduces precision. Build a more accurate set of housing-related expressions and check collocations and word forms. More precise terms such as “residential buildings,” “housing supply” and “overcrowding” would help communicate your points clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “as” and “because,” but complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “there are only way,” “many humans has to suffer,” and “people has to adjust,” where agreement or sentence structure is incorrect. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a raw houses” and “there are not a single apartments.” Several sentences run together, particularly the opening and the final body paragraph, so punctuation does not reliably show where one idea ends and another begins. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check agreement, articles and singular/plural forms, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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