Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I strongly disagree with idea, that building tall and large apartment will provides large cities to have enough homes. This is not the best approach and this essay i will try to explain from my perspective.

The first reason is air pollution. In the contemporary world, urban areas ,for example,large cities are crowded, lots of cars and different kinds of transoprtation, unfortunately, makes this situation even worst. Modern scholarships should us to spend our time in a green areas, such as park, gardens or even better in the forest. According to the long term plan to add even extra huge apartment will make situation worst.

The second significant reason is congestion. If we want to see this project as a long term, it must be clear that it causes some problems, such as overcrowed, huge lines at supermarket, traffic which is one of the toughest experience. Tokio is one of the large city in the world, milions of people are living there and even there exhist a wide range of problems.

Modern scholarchips and psychologyst should promote governments to not build tall apartment, because it rise high risk of suicide and it has very bad influence of peoples mood. For instance, in Finland there is none of high apartment and almost every apartment are same size.On the other hand look at post Soviet countires where tall and blocks how looks.

In conclusion, building tall apartment in large cities have more disadvantage then benefits.From my standpoint, it causes a wide range of problems and will not be very comfortable for people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the opening—“I strongly disagree”—and you give several reasons, including pollution, congestion and possible effects on residents’ wellbeing. These points are relevant to the question, and the Tokyo reference attempts to illustrate the pressures of a densely populated city. However, the response only partly develops the argument: it does not explain how building upward specifically causes more pollution, nor does it compare this approach with alternatives for providing homes. The claims about suicide and Finland are also asserted rather than supported, and the final reference to post-Soviet countries is difficult to interpret. Develop fewer points with clear explanations and relevant examples, and address why tall blocks are or are not the best solution.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons, and a conclusion that restates your disagreement. Sequencing phrases such as “The first reason,” “The second significant reason,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. The pollution paragraph moves from cars to green spaces and then to apartment construction without making the links explicit. The paragraph about congestion shifts to suicide and mood, so its central focus becomes difficult to track. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “this situation” and “this project” are not always precise. Give each body paragraph one main idea, explain it step by step, and use transitions that show the relationship between claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary suited to an argumentative essay, including “air pollution,” “congestion,” “long term,” and “wide range of problems.” These choices communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled forms make parts of the response harder to understand, such as “scholarchips,” “transoprtation,” “overcrowed,” and “exhist.” Some combinations are also unnatural: “huge lines at supermarket” and “toughest experience” do not express the intended ideas precisely. Repeated use of “large,” “problems,” and “situation” further limits variety. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, for example “traffic congestion,” “long queues at supermarkets,” and “urban green spaces.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both short statements and attempts at longer sentences, including a conditional structure beginning “If we want to see this project as a long term.” However, complex sentences are often not controlled, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “building tall and large apartment will provides” has problems with number and verb form, while “lots of cars … makes” has a subject–verb agreement error. “I strongly disagree with idea” also needs an article, and the opening sentence has an unnecessary comma after “idea.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using one clear main clause and a correctly formed subordinate clause.

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