Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, some people believe that building tall buildings in large cities will improve homelessness and also makes the city more developed and eye catching. However, from my perspective, providing tall buildings in cities would not complete the need of home because some financially low individuals could not afford the rent of tall apartments and as a result they could not make to it and have line in a low budget apartment that barely provides them their needs. Moreover, they will be forced to move into countryside because of the unnecessary rents and rush of the buildings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You take a discernible position against the claim, arguing that tall apartments may remain unaffordable for people on low incomes and could push them towards the countryside. These points are relevant to whether high-rise construction can provide enough homes. However, the response is far too brief to address the task adequately: it does not explain the affordability argument in detail, give a relevant example, or consider whether tall blocks might help meet housing demand. The opening also mentions homelessness and city development without developing either point. To strengthen your response, state your degree of agreement clearly, develop two relevant reasons with explanations or examples, and address the question’s focus on the best way to provide enough homes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic progression: it introduces the issue, signals a contrasting personal view with “However,” and adds a further consequence with “Moreover.” This helps the reader follow the general direction of your argument. At present, though, the whole response is one paragraph, and the ideas are compressed into a single long sentence after the opening. The relationship between unaffordable rent, low-budget apartments, and moving to the countryside is not clearly explained. Use separate paragraphs for your position and supporting reasons, and make each paragraph develop one main point. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links between cause and consequence would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “tall buildings,” “rent,” “countryside,” and “low budget apartment,” and phrases such as “from my perspective” help express your view. However, the range is limited, and several choices or combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “improve homelessness,” “complete the need of home,” and “rush of the buildings.” These expressions make it harder to understand exactly what you mean. Aim for more precise housing vocabulary and natural collocations, for example, describing whether high-rise construction can “ease the housing shortage” or whether rents are “affordable for low-income residents.” Varying repeated references to buildings and homes would also improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both a simple opening sentence and longer complex structures, including a clause beginning “because” and a result clause introduced by “as a result.” This shows some ability to connect ideas in extended sentences. However, control is uneven: “building tall buildings … will improve homelessness and also makes” shifts verb form, while “they could not make to it and have line” contains faulty sentence construction that obscures the intended meaning. The long sentence beginning “However” also needs clearer punctuation and more controlled clause structure. Practise keeping subject–verb forms consistent and building complex sentences around one clear main clause; then check agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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