Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Introduction:

This essay says that better way to gaves enough homes in bigger cities is to build great apartment blocks. I strongly agree to this argue .

Paragraph 1

The main reason is people will get the home with easy cost. For instance that some people belong to middle family and cannot efford the budget for buying own home to large cities and have limit cost and also want to move to main cities because the better study of their kids and many reason then the best option to this family to bought a homes in apartment blocks to main cities because its apartment have low budget demand then middle class family get easily home to large cities.

Paragraph 2

The other reason is many people wanted to bought the home in apartment. To illustrate that most of the apartment blocks build in main cities. Therefore, people watched the best place in main cities that also provide oppertunities of hospital, school, and also government department then they bought home in the department that build in main cities. One more reason that people save from theives. For example, many things thief in cities but in apartment people feel to save them. because many families lived in different blocks but one apartment then its save from thieveness.

Concullusion

in concullusion, I agree to that provide enough homes in cities through create apartment blocks because the normal families get the home easy cash and also get oppertunities of hospitality and many more and save from theiveness

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that tall apartment blocks can provide homes, and both body paragraphs give reasons related to affordability and access to city services. These points are relevant, but they are only partly developed. The first paragraph repeats that apartments are a “low budget” option without explaining how building upwards increases the number of homes or giving a specific example. The second introduces safety from theft, but the explanation is difficult to follow and does not clearly show why apartment blocks offer greater security. To strengthen the response, explain the link between high-rise construction and housing supply, and develop each reason with a clear example or consequence. The answer addresses the topic, but its supporting ideas remain limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group affordability and city facilities. Basic linking phrases such as “For instance,” “The other reason” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is often unclear: the first paragraph moves from family budgets to children’s education and then to apartment prices in one long chain. In the second, access to hospitals and schools shifts abruptly to theft, while repeated references to “main cities” and “apartment” make the links mechanical. Use shorter, clearly focused sentences and connect each example directly to its main point. This would make the overall organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “apartment blocks,” “middle class family,” “opportunities,” and “government department,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “easy cost,” “better study of their kids,” “bought a homes,” and “save from thieveness” are not natural or precise expressions. There are also spelling errors such as “efford,” “oppertunities,” and “Concullusion.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for housing and urban development, and check spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would help express your reasons without relying repeatedly on “home,” “city,” and “apartment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, and the overall position can usually be understood. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “For instance that some people belong to middle family…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “many people wanted to bought the home” combines verb forms incorrectly. There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “a homes” and the run-on sentence beginning “For instance.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly at the start of paragraphs and before “because.” Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then join ideas with one clear subordinate clause at a time.

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