Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes is best to build tall apartmemts blocks in cities to provide enough homes because it is easy and effective way to provid homes. Bacause the cities have less land to build the big houses because in cities there are many factories and palaza's for business and there are smal land for residence so tall apartments can fulfil there needs and give rooms os apartments to the peoples. Another reasons is that because the peples who gone from villages are aslo rest there and take jobs there for that the big houses are not provided for resindace because there is enpough land for make residancal buildings

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a clear position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give relevant reasons: limited land in cities and the arrival of people from villages seeking work. These points show a basic response to the question, but they are only briefly stated and the second reason is difficult to follow. The response also does not explore whether tall blocks are the best way to provide homes or consider any limitations or alternatives. The required minimum of 250 words is not met, so there is little space to explain your reasons or support them with examples. Develop each point with a clear explanation and a specific example, while maintaining your position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it states your opinion, then gives reasons related to limited urban land and migration from villages. This gives the reader a general sense of your argument. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the links between them are often unclear. For example, “Another reasons is that because” introduces a point, but the sentence continues into a confusing explanation about land and housing. Some connections are repeated rather than used to show precise relationships. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and use clear linking phrases such as “Furthermore” or “As a result” only where they accurately express the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “cities,” “land,” “factories,” “jobs” and “apartments,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several word choices or forms make the message difficult to understand, such as “palaza's,” “rooms os apartments” and “rest there.” Spelling errors, including “apartmemts,” “Bacause” and “resindace,” also strain the reader’s effort. Aim to learn accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling carefully. For instance, “limited space for residential development” would express your land argument more precisely than “smal land for residence,” while “accommodate new residents” could replace the unclear phrase about giving rooms to people.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example, “because the cities have less land to build the big houses,” and you use simple present forms to express your general view. However, sentence structures are very limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the argument hard to follow. In “Yes is best to build,” the sentence lacks a clear subject and article; “Another reasons is” has a number-agreement error; and the long sentence beginning “Another reasons is that because” does not form a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because” or “as.” Check articles, subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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