Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In over populated country largest buildings provide the significant amount of housing for peoples. It is often argued that for sufficient living cities need to construct skyscrapers. I believe that high rise buildings contains huge risk to earthquake and fire outbreak.

At first, as global warming is rising more natural calamity occurred throughout the world. In large cities authorities are trying to construct skyscrapers, which can be hazardous as number of earthquake occurred in the majority of the country. As a result, tallest buildings are going to be risky for living. The main reason is more taller the buildings are more chances of incidents going to rise. For instance, in Bangladesh government strict the rules for housing since rising threat of earthquake. Furthermore, incidents from fire is another big reason for not to built tall apartment in a big city. Generally, if fire strikes in a high rise apartment in a big city the lower chances to save the residents of that building. Since fire fighters equipment has it certain limits to climb and turn out the fire.

Additionally, big infrastructures consumed grater amount of sunlight than an average one. Therefore, the residents have to suffer more with extreme weather as a result they simply bought air conditioner for cool down the temperature, which has worst impact on environment.

To sum up, for a greater amount of housing high rise apartment may brought a serious damage to a certain place. Therefore government should strict the rules as well as maximize the monitoring of existing tall building to avoid disaster.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is identifiable: you oppose relying on tall apartment blocks, mainly because of earthquake and fire risks, and you add a concern about energy use and heat. These points are relevant, and the Bangladesh example gives one attempt at support. However, the response only partly answers the question of whether this is the best way to provide enough homes. It focuses on the disadvantages of high-rise buildings without comparing them with alternatives or explaining how other approaches could meet housing demand. Several claims, such as that taller buildings necessarily increase incident risks, need clearer explanation or evidence. Develop each reason with a specific example and acknowledge the housing benefits of building upwards before explaining why you still disagree.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas also follow a broadly logical order, moving from earthquake and fire risks to environmental effects. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Additionally” and “To sum up” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the opening point about global warming does not clearly connect to the earthquake argument, and the relationship between sunlight, extreme weather and air-conditioner use needs to be made explicit. Some transitions feel mechanical, while references such as “the lower chances” are unclear. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main reason, then connect each explanation and example directly to that reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “skyscrapers,” “natural calamity,” “earthquake,” “fire fighters” and “environment.” This gives the response enough topic-specific language to communicate its main concerns. However, noticeable word-choice, word-form and spelling problems sometimes make the meaning awkward or unclear. Examples include “over populated country,” “grater amount of sunlight,” “strict the rules” and “bought air conditioner for cool down.” Some phrases also do not collocate naturally, such as “fire outbreak” and “serious damage to a certain place.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than more elaborate wording: for example, use “densely populated country,” “enforce regulations” and “purchase air conditioning to cool their homes.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “as,” “which” and “since,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, comparison, articles and verb forms occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “high rise buildings contains” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “more taller the buildings are more chances” has an incorrect comparative structure. “The lower chances to save the residents” is also not a complete, well-formed clause. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check singular and plural subjects, verb forms, and sentence boundaries; for instance, write “the taller the buildings are, the greater the risk of incidents.”

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