Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Build tall appartment blocks in large cities is the best way to provide enough homes.I'm agree this statement because it is actually enough and save our environment by global warming and pollution.

One of the main reasons, I agree build tall apartment blocks in large cities because it helps to povide enough homes and land, where we can stay easily and we have enough land to use as a farming. Moreover, if the building tall apartment, save the nature because, when we made enough homes than we should be cut trees, which is one of the main cause of global warming. For examle, recently Nepal had to face the flash flood, which came from the mountains, where thousands of people died and It is caused human activities.In simply, if we save our environment and eco-system, environment save our life.

Secondly, build tall building reduce the pollutions, whereas we can make better transportation system and water supply system, because we have anough land where we can start different infrestructure, roads, water tanks and we save the animals life. For example, if we do not make different houses, there animals can stay. In addition, it also help families relationships, we do not need to make seperate houses for living and we can leave an apartments with together.

I,m completely agrree to build tall apartment blocks is the best way to prvides home, because in tall building we have enough apartments and rooms. Moreover, it save people, animals and our eco-system and make clean, beautiful and peacefull environment.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes, and you give relevant reasons involving land use, environmental protection and shared infrastructure. However, the response only partly develops these points. For example, you claim that high-rise housing leaves land available for farming, but do not explain how this would work or compare it with other housing approaches. The Nepal flash-flood example is also not clearly connected to apartment construction, so it does not effectively support the argument. The point about family relationships is introduced but remains unclear. To strengthen the response, explain each main reason with a direct link to the question and use examples that clearly demonstrate the benefits of high-rise housing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally group related points, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Secondly” and “In addition” help show the intended sequence. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear explanation. For instance, the discussion moves from reducing pollution to transport, water supply and animal habitats, without showing how these points connect. Some linking expressions are also awkward or repetitive, including “In simply” and repeated uses of “because.” Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point. Clearer links between claims and examples would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “apartment blocks,” “global warming,” “transportation system” and “eco-system,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “provide enough homes and land,” “reduce the pollutions,” and “leave an apartments with together”; these phrases do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also misspellings such as “appartment,” “povide” and “infrestructure.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing housing and urban planning, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the benefits of high-rise housing without relying on repeated general terms such as “enough” and “save.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “which” and “if.” This shows an effort to express reasons and consequences. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty; errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation frequently make the meaning unclear. For example, “I'm agree this statement” and “build tall building reduce the pollutions” have incorrect verb patterns, while “when we made enough homes than we should be cut trees” has problems with tense and clause construction. Sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “human activities.In simply.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check verb forms and punctuation when editing.

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