Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

goverment significantly not provide house in large cities but also gives apartements blocks in large cities

now days goverments provides apartement bets places and give people s because the reason of over population and also society also prefer apartments because of expenses of houses matainence and garden maintence and also house bill is too much high and gas bill also thy why people alwaya chose apartements but while ome people want to houses in large cities because houses is fixed assets and some people to love to live in apartement and also some people love to live in house its depent the choice in my prospects , apartements is god because i also live in apartements in askar five malir cantt the are alot of apartements amd houses but apartements matience is reasonable price and alos apartement rent is not too much high becuse since when i wan in child so i lived in my own houses ut are re too musch houses and huhe population and pollution but apartements is hod for living on the othe hand government not provide not too much houses becaus ethe reason of large population and also many people want to live in happy and best live this is the only reason built tall apartements is good for nature and the you build secure population and also plant too much

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You refer to the topic and give a broadly supportive view, especially when you say that building tall apartments is “good” and mention their lower maintenance costs. Your personal example about living in apartments also gives the response some relevant support. However, the position is difficult to identify consistently: you discuss people who prefer houses and apartments without clearly explaining how far you agree that tall blocks are the best solution. Several points, including population growth, pollution and planting, are mentioned but not explained or linked clearly to the question. The response also does not meet the required 250 words. To strengthen your answer, state your position directly, develop two relevant reasons with examples, and explain any limitations of apartment construction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable attempt to connect ideas, using phrases such as “because of” and “on the other hand,” and the response stays broadly on the housing topic. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the long sequence of points makes the progression difficult to follow. The contrast between apartment living and house ownership is introduced but not organised into a clear argument. Some links are repetitive or unclear, such as repeated uses of “and also,” while references such as “this is the only reason” do not clearly identify the idea being referred to. Use an introduction, separate body paragraphs for your main reasons, and a conclusion. Shorter sentences and more precise linking would make the relationships between points easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “over population,” “fixed assets,” “maintenance,” “rent,” and “pollution,” and you attempt to discuss costs and housing preferences. This gives you a basic range for the subject. However, vocabulary is often repetitive, particularly “apartments,” “houses,” and “people,” and frequent spelling and word-form errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “goverment,” “apartement,” “matainence,” and “depent.” Some combinations are also unclear, such as “secure population” and “happy and best live.” Build a bank of accurate housing terms and check spelling and collocations. More precise expressions for affordability, housing supply and urban density would help communicate your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and contrasts, including with “because” and “while,” but most ideas are placed in long, loosely connected sentence strings rather than controlled sentence structures. Errors in verb forms and agreement are frequent, as in “goverments provides” and “houses is,” and articles and plurals are often missing or inconsistent. The sentence beginning “now days goverments provides” is difficult to follow because several clauses are joined without clear punctuation. There is little evidence of accurate complex sentence control, so meaning is sometimes obscured. Practise writing one main idea per sentence, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and using full stops to separate clauses. Then add a few carefully controlled complex sentences to show relationships between ideas.

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