Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays it is widely argued that the best way to provide enough homes in urban areas that are large in acres, is to construct tall building or appartement blocks to cover less space and to fill the demand of the buyers, it have lots of benefits but there are certain challenges to do it.

On the first hand, it is easy to build tall buildings and appartments for public sectors, and can be more safe then the normal areas, because there is a boundary around the building or the apartments which did not allows everyone to come in, is someone wants t come in they have to cross the security area, For example security guards with checking machine are at the enterance point where every person have to show their identitiy which is a safe way to live in a place, also can be more benficial for the people,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the topic and begins to support tall apartment blocks by mentioning efficient land use and security, including guards and identity checks. However, it does not clearly state how far you agree or disagree, and it does not develop the central question of whether high-rise construction is the best way to provide enough homes. The discussion is very limited: there is no developed comparison with alternatives or explanation of the challenges mentioned in the introduction. The response contains 141 words, so it is 109 words below the required minimum; this leaves the task substantially incomplete. To improve, state your position directly, explain two relevant reasons with examples, and address any counterargument before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the issue, followed by a paragraph beginning “On the first hand” that gives a reason and an example. The example about security guards is connected to the point about safety. However, the response ends abruptly, with no conclusion or clear progression beyond this single supporting idea. Several links are awkward or unclear, such as “because there is a boundary … which did not allows everyone to come in,” and the long opening sentence combines several points without clear separation. Use distinct paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and connect each idea with accurate, varied transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “urban areas,” “tall buildings,” “demand,” “security,” and “identity.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited, and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “appartement,” “enterance,” “identitiy,” and “benficial.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “large in acres” and “fill the demand of the buyers.” Aim for more precise housing and urban-planning vocabulary, and check spelling carefully. For example, you could refer to “high-density housing,” “housing demand,” and “residents” rather than relying on broad or awkward expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express reasons and supporting detail using clauses with “because” and “where,” and the main ideas can generally be followed. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and the long opening sentence is difficult to control. There are frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries: “it have lots of benefits,” “which did not allows,” and “every person have to show” should be corrected to match their subjects and tense. The sentence beginning “is someone wants t come in” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurately formed subordinate clauses and consistent punctuation.

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