Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The good way to give enough homes in bigger cities is to build large bulding of apartments with good space.

This eesay will agree with this statement buliding a tall apartment blocks is very complusary in bigger cities.

In bigger cities the number of pepole are increasing with time duration, people moves from smaller cities to bigger cities because it has more facilty and also more jobs. students who take admissions in university face the problem of hostels they can not find place for living, this same problem also faced by job holder they have to travel almost differnt hours. For Example; My elder brother who recently take admission in university that is located at lahore. It is bigger city here pepole comes from different cities, my brother can not start study because he can not get place for their living.

Futhermore, the pepole moves to bigger cities because here is more options for their earning, and pepole also start earning but their living expance are to much about 50 percent of their money are taken in this expance. For instance; My sister who live in bigger city with there famiy her husband did hardwork for their family with living expance are to much all month they are worried to collect money for rent.

In conclusion building tall aparment is a good idea becauase it will consume less space and provide enough living place for students and for job holders

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position in favour of tall apartment blocks, and your examples about your brother seeking accommodation in Lahore and your sister’s family struggling with rent are relevant to housing pressure in large cities. However, the response only partially develops the task: it explains why people move to cities and why housing is costly, but gives little detail about how tall blocks would provide enough homes or whether they are the best solution. The conclusion briefly mentions using less space, but this point is not explained in the body. The response is also 10 words below the required minimum. To strengthen your answer, explain the benefits of high-rise housing and support your position with a more developed example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs generally group related points: the first discusses people moving for education and work, while the second focuses on living costs. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “For example” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and the examples do not always connect explicitly to the claim about tall apartment blocks. Repeated use of “people” and “bigger cities” also makes the flow feel repetitive. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each example supports your position; vary referencing and linking rather than relying mainly on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a limited but relevant set of vocabulary to discuss housing, migration, education and employment, including “apartments,” “university,” “jobs” and “rent.” The reader can generally understand your main points, but frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the message difficult to follow. Examples include “bulding,” “facilty,” “expance” and “complusary.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “with time duration” and “different hours,” and “living place” is imprecise. Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For instance, use “housing costs” rather than “living expance,” and “commute for several hours” rather than “travel almost differnt hours.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including explanations with “because” and examples introduced by “who.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range remains limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “the number of pepole are increasing,” “people moves” and “my sister who live.” Articles, pronouns and sentence boundaries also need attention; for example, “my brother can not start study because he can not get place for their living” contains several grammatical problems, while the opening has an incomplete construction: “This eesay will agree with this statement.” These frequent errors can make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build longer sentences from correctly formed clauses.

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