Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the importance of best way to provide wnough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks which as always debateable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that if it is beneficial while other reject this notion. The substantialinfluence of this trend has sparked controversy over its potential impact in recent years. In my opinion the former proposition appears to be more rational. This essay will further elaborate my views for favouring the positive impact of this trend and thus will lead to a logical conckusion.

analyzing the statement and explaining further the first and the foremost reason behind this is that it cover less space and people are living in there privacy as well. Another striking benefits in this regard is that if there are less homes and more apartment buildings then the goverment also provides a greenery garden and for sport a large ground or stadium where childeren plays in their free time.

probing ahead one of the main underlying reasons stems from the fact is that you don not construct your house as you wish for because every apartment is same as other . moving further it is pertinent to mention that less houses and construct more apartment to coverage less space and maintain more residential apartment. apart from the reasons mentioned above it can be clearly stated why many are in favor of this trend.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position in favour of tall apartment blocks, and you offer relevant points: they use less land and may leave room for gardens or sports facilities. However, the response only partially develops the argument. The claim that residents have “their privacy” is not explained, and the later point that apartments are all alike introduces a drawback without clarifying how it affects your overall view. The conclusion is also not fully established. The response contains 223 words, so it is 27 words below the 250-word minimum; the 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. To strengthen your response, explain each reason with a clear example and address whether apartment blocks are the best solution compared with alternatives.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening gives your position, and the next paragraphs introduce supporting points and a concern about uniform apartments. Linking phrases such as “Another striking benefits” and “moving further” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not develop one clear point at a time, and the final sentence repeats the general position rather than drawing the argument together. Some links are also unclear: “apart from the reasons mentioned above” does not lead to a distinct concluding idea. Use a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for each reason, and a conclusion that restates your position. Connect each sentence by explaining how it supports the main argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related and formal vocabulary, including “controversy,” “residential,” “underlying reasons,” and “pertinent to mention.” This gives you some range beyond basic everyday words. However, the vocabulary is limited in precision, and noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the message harder to understand, such as “wnough,” “conckusion,” and “coverage less space.” Several phrases are also unnatural or repetitive, including “the positive impact of this trend” and “less homes and more apartment buildings.” Choose simpler, accurate expressions when unsure, and learn common collocations for housing and urban planning. Proofreading spelling and checking whether each phrase sounds natural would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “The substantial influence of this trend has sparked controversy over its potential impact in recent years.” This shows an effort to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, the range remains limited, and complex attempts are often faulty, so readers must work to interpret several sentences. Examples include “which as always debateable has now become more controversial,” “it cover less space,” and “where childeren plays.” There are recurring problems with sentence construction, subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with one clear clause at a time. Check that every sentence has a complete structure and that verbs agree with their subjects.

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