Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

agree

1 more block means more space

2 less palce wil take and the weather will be goodf in the uooer sky

It is often argue that, the best way to provide enough homes in larghe cities to build high rise buildings while others think that this is not perfect solution. In my opinion, the best way to solve this problem is to building high rise buildings which will capture a large number of peoples at once in short space.

Building tall apartments will have some benefits. One of them is tall buildings have more blocks than short buildins . As a result, it will have more space for more people. Furthermore, more family can stay in one building for which people can live withe thier relatives as a neighbour.

Another benefit is that, less places will needed for apartments and homes. If people are building more buildings accourding to their needs then there will be no space for parks and to move around. For instance, there will be no place for childrens to play. Building tall buyildings will increase open space and give space for chindrens to play. Furthermore, the air condition and environemnt in most of the large cities are not suitable. largwe cities have factories, industries etc. As a result people become more keen into live there for better jobs and better life. People from rural sides also attracted for those jobs and come to the big cities . In addition, most of the cities are over polluted and there is lot of noice and air pollution there. However, tall buildings uppers floors are out of the area of these noices and pollution. The weather in above are less polluted than the surface.So, I think that tall buildings are more convinient.

In conclusion, buildings tall buildings will save space and give people the chance to live with their relatives. In addition tall buildings will save spaces for parks and children playgrounds.The weather condition in big cities at low altitude is not so good however, tall buildings will give tthem a chance to live better atmosphere.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that tall apartment buildings are the best way to provide homes, and you give relevant reasons, including accommodating more residents on less land and preserving space for parks and children’s play. The example about cities attracting people seeking work also helps explain the pressure on housing. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the claim that upper floors offer cleaner air and better weather needs qualification or support, and the point about living near relatives is not developed as clearly as the space argument. To strengthen the response, explain how each reason directly increases housing provision and use a specific example to support your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the main ideas generally follow a sensible order. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “As a result” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between points. However, progression within the second body paragraph becomes difficult to follow: it moves from land for parks to job migration, pollution and upper-floor conditions without clearly connecting each step. Some transitions are also mechanical, and references such as “there” and “these noises” are not always precise. Group related points together, use topic sentences to guide each paragraph, and make the links between housing demand, land use and building height explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “high rise buildings,” “open space,” “factories,” and “air pollution,” so the reader can understand your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “more blocks than short buildings,” “less places,” “weather in above,” and repeated misspellings such as “buildins” and “environemnt.” Some phrases, including “capture a large number of peoples,” do not express the intended meaning idiomatically. Build a more accurate set of housing and urban-planning expressions, check spelling carefully, and choose precise terms rather than repeating “space” and “buildings.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If people are building more buildings…” and a relative clause in “for which people can live…”. This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to follow. For example, “It is often argue” has an incorrect verb form, “more family can stay” has a number-agreement problem, and “less places will needed” is missing an auxiliary and uses an unsuitable quantifier. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “the best way… to build” and the run-on transition before “So, I think.” Practise accurate clause patterns and proofread each sentence for verbs, agreement and punctuation.

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