Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays,This topic has become widely discussed issue in modern society. While some people believe that make building large for apartment is better than make house in large cities and other argue that, houses is comfortable than compared to apartment. apartment destroy our peace. In my opinion, i believe that make apartment is better option because it can be significant impact on individual and society.

To begin with, one of the main reason is that for this apartments are affordable for every poor person purchased easily. This is because it can provide several benefits and help people for improve their lives. For example, i purchased a apartment in 2010 . I have only 2 room,one washroom and one kitchen in apartment. this apartment have difficult to survive for 8 people. Apartment was affordable for compared with houses. As a result, it can develop their knowledge, skills and overall quality of life. This is important factor should be taken into consideration.

furthermore, the another important reason is that made houses. In Other words, live in house is full for privacy and easy to live. In houses, we have adjust in many room with owned. For instance, i made a house in mid of islamabad city. In my home, i have 4 beds, three washroom, 2 kitchen and 1 drawing room. This place have comfortable and easily to live for 8 peoples. In my opinion, i believe that the advantages is that approach can be considerable, provided it can be used appropriately. Consequently, it can contribute for positive outcomes both individual and society.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that house has comfortable and relax to our privacy and apartment have good option for city because apartment build in a large buildings. Ultimately, it can approach is to consider issue carefully and make decision for both individual and society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a position in the introduction, saying apartments are the “better option,” and you also recognise that houses offer privacy and comfort. However, the response only partially answers the question because it does not clearly explain whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. The examples about your apartment and house describe personal living conditions, but do not show how high-rise construction addresses housing demand or compare it with other solutions. Your position also becomes unclear: the conclusion favours houses for comfort while calling apartments a good city option. Develop a consistent view and connect each reason directly to the effectiveness of tall blocks in supplying homes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from affordability to a personal example and then to improving knowledge and quality of life without explaining the links. The second paragraph shifts from houses’ privacy to an unclear claim about their advantages. Some linking phrases, including “As a result” and “Consequently,” introduce conclusions that do not clearly follow from the preceding points. Use each paragraph to develop one relevant reason, and make references and transitions show how the evidence supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “affordable,” “privacy,” “apartment” and “large cities,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to understand. For example, “make building large for apartment” and “houses is comfortable than compared to apartment” do not express the comparison clearly; “full for privacy” is also an unsuitable collocation. Repeated use of “comfortable,” “better” and “important” limits precision. Build a more accurate set of housing terms and use natural collocations, such as “high-rise apartment blocks,” “housing supply,” “living space” and “greater privacy.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason-and-example structure beginning “This is because,” and a conditional phrase with “provided.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms can make the message hard to follow. Examples include “one of the main reason,” “houses is comfortable,” “this apartment have” and “i made a house.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “Nowadays,This topic” and “2 room,one washroom.” Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and complete sentences before adding complexity. Check articles, plural nouns, capitalisation and punctuation during revision.

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