Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the moderan era, there are too much homes and tall appartment blocks build in large cities todays. the best way to gave enough homes in big cities is to build tall apartment blocks I partically agree with this statement. In this essay, I will discuss own reasons and explain.

On the one hand, available too much homes in big cities or build tall apartment blocks. However, some people is rich or they can build own homes in big cities or available rented tall apartment blocks because some people own homes while other people live in rented home pay charges. For instance, government gave home and tall apartment for employees free of cost. Therefore, It is the good way to improve good infracture or more people move to city than village.

On the other hand, a lot of facilities available in big cities. However, it is the good way to provide enough home in big cities because too much homes is already available in large cities and less available place for different purposes. For example, roads, hospitals, parks and play ground less space available in big cities. Therefore, this all places is necessary for people live in rular area or urban area.

In conclusion, I partically agree because I beleaved tha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You take a position by saying, “I partically agree,” and you mention relevant issues such as housing provision, rented homes, and the need for space for roads, hospitals and parks. However, the response only partially answers the question: it does not clearly explain when or why tall apartment blocks are the best solution, and several points are difficult to interpret, such as “available too much homes.” The conclusion is unfinished, so your final position is not reinforced. The response is also 39 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop and support your reasons. To strengthen the answer, explain both the benefits and drawbacks of building upwards, then support each with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Your response has an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the discussion. You also use linking expressions such as “For instance” and “Therefore.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the first body paragraph shifts between wealthy people, rented apartments and government housing without showing how these points connect. The second paragraph’s contrast is also unclear, and the conclusion stops mid-sentence. Some connectors, especially repeated “However” and “Therefore,” feel mechanical rather than showing precise relationships. Give each paragraph one main point, explain it in a logical sequence, and use referencing and linking words only where their meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “apartment blocks,” “rented,” “facilities,” “infrastructure,” and “available.” These choices show an effort to discuss housing and city planning, but the range is basic and several word forms, spellings or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. Examples include “moderan,” “appartment,” “infracture,” and “rular,” as well as the unclear phrase “available too much homes.” Repetition of “big cities,” “homes” and “good way” also limits precision. Build a topic vocabulary set and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “housing supply,” “high-rise buildings,” and “urban infrastructure” where appropriate. Aim to express each idea with a precise phrase rather than repeating general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a sentence introduced by “because” and examples introduced by “For instance.” However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent, and errors often make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “there are too much homes” has a quantifier and agreement problem, while “some people is rich” has subject–verb disagreement. In “government gave home,” the verb form and article are not controlled, and several sentences lack a clear grammatical structure. The conclusion, “I partically agree because I beleaved tha,” is incomplete. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, countable nouns and articles, then build longer sentences from clear, complete clauses.

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