Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The worlds' population is rising rapidly. Cities are becoming more larger and consucting new buildings are the best way to provide houses to people who wanted to move from country side to city. In my opinion, I agree with the larger extend that construction building is best for cities. But, we cannot ignore some of negative, which i will discuss in upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with, constructing new tall building can beneficial for people such as it take small

space and several people can live there. For instance, urben area provide more opportunities to people. However, living in cities provide facilities such as higher education for children, moreover it saves transportation cost and time.

Nevertheless cities are becoming overcrowded because of people who want to imigrate to cities for better opportunities. For instance, because of overcrowd traffic congestion and pollution are increase significantly. However, green spaces are less in public denisy area.

Nonetheless, living in cities can be more easier for all age group because it provide several facilities. For instance, living in country side old citizen have to travel to the cities for health issues. Moreover, constructing new building also take less space, however in cities facilities are avaiable 24/7 hours.

To conclude, I believe that contructing new tall building blocks can be more beneficial for people to live there, however it provide more facilities and opportunities to people. In cities, it is easy to find job for worker and they provide good salary. Moreover, living i

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“I agree with the larger extend”—and give relevant points about the space efficiency of tall buildings and access to jobs, education and healthcare. However, the response only partially develops the task: several points concern the general benefits of city life rather than explaining why tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. The drawbacks of overcrowding, traffic, pollution and limited green space are mentioned but not weighed against your position or answered. The conclusion is also cut off at “Moreover, living i”, leaving the final idea incomplete. The response is two words below the required minimum. Develop fewer points with specific explanation or examples, and complete the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a recognisable essay shape, with an introduction, body paragraphs and a concluding section, and paragraph openings such as “To begin with” and “Nevertheless” help signal stages in the discussion. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the relationship between ideas is often unclear. For example, “However, living in cities provide facilities” does not clearly contrast with the preceding point about tall buildings, and “Nonetheless” introduces another benefit without resolving the earlier concerns about overcrowding. Several linking words are used mechanically or inaccurately, and the final sentence stops mid-phrase. Organise each paragraph around one clear claim, explain how it supports your position, and use fewer, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “overcrowded,” “traffic congestion,” “pollution,” “green spaces” and “facilities,” so the reader can identify the main subject. The range is nevertheless limited and several spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts of the response harder to understand, such as “consucting,” “urben area,” “public denisy area” and “imigrate.” Phrases such as “larger extend” and “provide houses to people” are also not natural in this context. Build a more accurate set of expressions for housing and urban planning, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish the benefits of high-rise housing from the general advantages of living in a city.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example “because of people who want to imigrate to cities for better opportunities.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, agreement, articles and verb forms. Examples include “Cities are becoming more larger,” “constructing new tall building can beneficial,” “it take small space,” and “pollution are increase significantly.” Some sentences also join ideas in ways that obscure their grammatical relationship, particularly those linked with “however” and “moreover.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, and the structure of comparisons.

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