Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The more convienent way to provide sufficient homes in large cities was to construct tall apartments blocks.I agreed with this statement by building tall apartments block there are alot of facilities, such as less monthly expenses,safety or protections,and conected with our society.

Building tall apartments blocks provide more resident place as compared to having seperate home.In the space of one house we build a tall large apartment blocks and there are alot of people lget residental placce.In home we donnot enjoy any facility and there are alot 0of expenses electricity bill or gass bills,but in the case of apartments we pay only the monthly rent and enjoy all the facilities that are provides in the home.By having seperate home people are not social and donnot have any feelings of others,on the other hand in tall apartment there are many places where individuals are sit together and know about others afairs ,For example in our country mostly people had their own home and they only stay at their homes and donot know what happend around him,

Furthermore,in apartments blocks there have a syestem every society had a guard which look after the entire blocks and donnot allow any stranger to enter into the society even he can contuct to any person of the apartment.In seperate homes there are lack of security and protections.

In conculsion,our efforts are to build more and more apartment because there are alot of problem which are faced by the peoples thet are living in their own homes.this is the best or more secure way in the present society and it is less expensive than others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that tall apartment blocks are a good way to provide homes, and you give relevant reasons, including accommodating more residents in limited space and providing security. The example about guards helps illustrate the safety point. However, the response only partly develops the task: it does not compare apartment blocks with other ways cities could provide housing, and several claims—such as apartments being less expensive and making people more social—are asserted rather than explained or supported. The discussion of facilities and monthly costs is also unclear, so the reader cannot fully understand the comparison. To strengthen the response, explain how each reason addresses the shortage of homes and develop at least one example in more detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. Connectors such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several different points are joined together in long sentences, particularly in the first body paragraph. The links between housing capacity, expenses, social contact, and the example are not always clear, and references such as “they” and “him” can leave the reader unsure who is meant. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details clearly, and use linking phrases and pronouns only where their meaning is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “sufficient homes,” “monthly expenses,” “security,” and “resident place,” and you attempt to express ideas about housing and community life. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “resident place,” “connected with our society,” and “know about others affairs.” Frequent spelling errors—including “convienent,” “seperate,” and “conculsion”—also reduce accuracy and can slow the reader. Aim to learn topic-specific phrases as complete units, such as “accommodate more residents” and “provide a sense of community,” and proofread carefully for spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish your points about affordability, facilities, and safety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and contrasts, for example, “on the other hand” introduces a comparison. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “The more convenient way … was” and “a guard which look after”; articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. For instance, the opening runs several ideas together without clear punctuation, while “there are alot of people lget residental placce” is not grammatically interpretable. These recurring problems sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using clear clauses and consistent tense.

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