Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is an opinion that the large number of people should have residence in tall buildings to manage the population in big cities. I personally disagree with this idea because the tall buildings can be damaged by natural disasters easily, the risk of lift accidents should also be considered and the length of buildings can put barriers for the nature to be seen.

The base of tall buildings cannot carry the burden of a large number of flats on it during the natural destructive incidents. When people face drastic eathquakes, those are the tall buildings which fall first. Hence, the tall buildings idea can be a huge threat to a lot of lives. For example; in an earthquake in 2005, a tall hotel in Pakistan was destroyed and a number of people were buried under it. These type of buildings also have the risks of accidents because most of the buildings use lifts to carry people to their floors. Those lifts have chances to stop working anytime and damaging anybody trapped in them.

The buildings with unnecessary height can also block the scenes of nature. The sky-sighting becomes the whole task even. Furthermore, when we put a barrier of such buildings, we stop people to interact with nature easily. Such troubles can cause traumas and depression for the people who love sky, moon and the stars. They feel imprisoned in between those tall-height buildings. For example; we do not see poets like George Elliot and Wordsworth these days because someone becomes poet when he feels the connection with nature but when this generation sees only tall residential areas made out of bricks, these bricks put the bars infront of their imaginations as well.

To conclude, the tall buildings can be destroyed in natural accidents and those also have the risks to damage the lives in lift accidents. The tall heights of buildings also block the views of nature making people depressed and traumatised.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you disagree with relying on tall apartment blocks, and the conclusion restates this view. You give relevant reasons—earthquake danger, lift failures, and reduced access to views of nature—and the Pakistan earthquake example helps illustrate the safety concern. However, the response does not fully establish why these risks make tall blocks a poor way to provide enough homes, or compare them with other housing approaches. The lift point is also asserted rather than supported, while the discussion of nature and poets takes up considerable space without clearly showing how it affects the housing question. Develop each reason with a direct link to the prompt and explain the practical consequences for city housing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your position, two body paragraphs present reasons, and a conclusion summarises them. Linking expressions such as “Hence,” “Furthermore,” and “To conclude” make the progression easy to follow, and the earthquake example is placed alongside the relevant point. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in connecting ideas. At times, however, links are mechanical or the relationship between claims is unclear. For instance, the move from lift failures to the effect of building height on nature is abrupt, and the extended discussion of poets does not clearly connect back to housing provision. Use topic sentences that frame each paragraph around the task and make each example explicitly support its main claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “natural disasters,” “burden,” “imprisoned,” and “traumas and depression,” so the reader can understand your main concerns. However, several noticeable word-choice and collocation problems make some phrases unnatural or unclear: “the length of buildings,” “sky-sighting,” “drastic eathquakes,” and “put the bars infront of their imaginations.” Spelling errors such as “eathquakes” and “infront” also affect accuracy. Some expressions are repeated, particularly “tall buildings,” and the vocabulary for discussing urban housing remains limited. Aim for precise, natural combinations such as “building height,” “obstruct views,” and “earthquake-resistant structures,” and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “I personally disagree … because…” and a conditional construction beginning “when this generation sees…”. Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the large number of people should have residence” has an awkward article and noun construction, while “These type of buildings” has a number-agreement error. In “those are the tall buildings which fall first,” the structure is also awkward, and the semicolon after “For example” is not appropriate. Work on articles, singular/plural agreement, and punctuation around introductory phrases. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentences easier to read.

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