Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It has been observed that, In many country people build a tall building instead the small houses to provide the enough homes for people who was transfer from one place to another of from one country to another country. Although, Some people believe that it was the best idea to provide enough homes in large cities is to make a tall apartment blocks.

I frimily agree with the given statements, By making tall building amd make then into apartments blocks in large cities it will be very helpfuled for the people who was seeking for the homes and it can be best way to provide enough rooms for the people. For instance, Making tall apartment blocks can cover limite area and provide more benefts for people for example making parks, playground for childrens, garden etc. It can be greatly beneficial to individuals and the society.

Futhermore, other reason to prove my point is that it may helped in government sectors also because of that government can not worride for people who can not have placed to stay in a large cities. people can be fell more secure by living in a apartments. Moreover, People can meet diffrent person from diffrent culture, difrrent town, difrrent culture, language, festivals, traditionals and as well as diffrent cultural dress. In a large cities people living in tall apartment blocks build a new relationship, diffrent kind of attachments with each other's.

in conclusion; I believe that by providing enough homes for people in a large cities by build a tall apartments blocks. Instead, It helps people to more passion, build a communication skill. It will encourage people to developed feelings of helped by diffrent ways.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: “I frimily agree” indicates strong agreement, and you give relevant reasons, including using less land and providing shared facilities, as well as possible social benefits for residents. However, the response addresses the question only partially because the main reasons are asserted rather than explained with specific, convincing support. For example, the claim that apartment blocks allow parks and playgrounds is not developed to show how this works or why it makes them the best way to provide homes. The points about government and cultural relationships are also broad and do not directly establish that tall blocks are the best solution. Develop two central arguments with clear explanations and a relevant example, while maintaining your position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the second body paragraph moves from government concerns to security and then to cultural relationships without clearly connecting these ideas to the main claim. Some linking expressions are used mechanically or inaccurately, and repeated references to “diffrent” cultures and people make the discussion feel repetitive. The conclusion introduces ideas about patience and communication skills that have not been established in the body. Group related points together, use clear topic sentences, and make each paragraph develop one main reason in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to housing and urban life, including “apartment blocks,” “secure,” “cultural,” and “relationship.” However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “frimily,” “helpfuled,” “worride,” and “difrrent.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “provide enough rooms” and “build a new relationship.” Aim to use accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “accommodate residents” or “make efficient use of land” would help express your ideas clearly without relying on repeated general words such as “people” and “different.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a concession beginning “Although” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “people who was transfer” has incorrect agreement and verb form, while “it may helped” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The opening “Although” clause is not properly connected to a main clause, and several sentences begin with capital letters after commas or continue as run-ons. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check punctuation.

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