Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the earth the natural wealth is limited but the demand of human has no limitation. So, as the population growing up, the demand for housing is increasing day by day. However, in this situation building large apartment blocks can be a sollution for providing enough housing. And I firmly agree with this view.

On the one hand, there is a scracity of wealth in the earth so that we have to utilize this limited resources carefully. There is a numorous change is happend in population growth in whole over the world, eventually it is increasing humorously. So, the issue of providing enough house for the people is a challange for the authorities. In this situation, building skyscarpers is one of the probable sollution for mitigate this problem. Because if we live in a scattered way that can consume more place with little amount of habitants, but if we build tall buildings that may help to creat many habitants for people in a short place.

On the other hand, despite a lot of popullation pressure in large city is increasing, because people are migrated from countryside to town, and that creat huge pressure on housing. Hence, the pressure can be demolished by fashioning tall buildings, it can reduce the pressure of providing enough home for the people. Moreover, a well desigend and planned city may be created a peacefull place to live.

In conclusion, though there is many cities in the world, but regarding those the large city carries a huge pressure of population just because of better life and opportunity. As a consequence, it enhence the demand of housing. And I consider that, the tall build apartment blocks is the most siginificat way to solve this problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you firmly agree that tall apartment blocks can help provide enough housing, and the response stays focused on the topic. You give relevant reasons, including limited land, population growth and migration from rural areas to cities. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than explained with specific examples or fuller reasoning. For instance, the claim that tall buildings can house many people in a small area is relevant, but you could explain how this compares with low-rise development or identify practical limits such as infrastructure and overcrowding. The point about creating a “peaceful place to live” is also not clearly connected to the housing argument. Develop each main reason more fully and support it with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can follow the broad progression from population pressure to the proposed solution. Linking phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help signal paragraph roles. However, the two body paragraphs largely repeat the same point—that population growth and migration increase housing demand—rather than developing distinct aspects of the argument. Some connections are also unclear: “despite” does not fit the sentence beginning “despite a lot of population pressure,” and “Hence” introduces a conclusion without a clearly established step in the reasoning. Organise each paragraph around a separate reason and use linking expressions that accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “population growth,” “housing,” “authorities” and “skyscrapers,” and the main meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “the demand of human,” “increasing humorously,” “create many habitants” and “fashioning tall buildings”; these do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “scracity,” “sollution,” “challange” and “desigend” are also noticeable. Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing urban housing, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the benefits and limitations of high-rise development without relying on repeated general terms such as “pressure” and “problem.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including clauses introduced by “so,” “because” and “though.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but complex sentences are often not controlled accurately, and errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. For example, “as the population growing up” lacks a correctly formed verb, while “there is a numorous change is happend” combines incompatible structures. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement and sentence construction, as in “the tall build apartment blocks is” and “though there is many cities.” Work on forming complete clauses, matching subjects and verbs, and using articles and plurals consistently. Shorter, accurate sentences would provide a clearer base for more complex structures.

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