Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Build tall apartment blocks is most efficent method to enough homes in the large city due to fact day by by number of people growing insteadly,thats may cause the problem they effect on city envirnoment.i am completely agree with this approach.

people build individual farm house there have covered near about 3 or 4 kanal earth,they can effect to increase the number of houses in society and cities.

in 1980 deccrese number of population and decreae number of houses because they have not any sources to build its own home even money have not enough to eat somethings.people survive by using their on land to put in rice and fruits and vegetables.

after 2000 people may have increase insteadly the source of income and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear position in the opening—“i am completely agree with this approach”—and connect housing demand with population growth. However, the response only minimally addresses whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes. The discussion shifts to individual farmhouses, land use, and conditions in 1980, without explaining how these points support or challenge high-rise construction. The final sentence is unfinished, so the argument has no developed conclusion. The response is also 126 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to explain reasons or give a relevant example. To strengthen the response, develop two focused reasons for your position and show how each supports building tall blocks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to move from an opening opinion to supporting points, and time references such as “in 1980” and “after 2000” suggest an intended sequence. However, the ideas do not form a clear progression: the discussion moves from population growth to farmhouses and then to past poverty without showing how these points connect to the question. Paragraphing is minimal, and there are no clear links between the claims. The final phrase, “the source of income and,” is incomplete and leaves the response without closure. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons and examples, and a conclusion; use linking phrases to make the relationship between each point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “apartment blocks,” “population,” “sources,” and “environment,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “individual farm house” and “kanal.” However, spelling and word-choice errors often make the meaning difficult to follow: “efficent,” “deccrese,” and “insteadly” are unclear, while “covered near about 3 or 4 kanal earth” is not a natural way to describe land use. Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “enough homes” where “provide sufficient housing” would be clearer. Build a reliable set of housing and urban-planning terms, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to express reasons and time relationships, for example with “due to fact” and “because,” but most sentences rely on simple structures and several are incomplete or difficult to interpret. In “Build tall apartment blocks is most… method,” the subject and verb form do not agree; “i am completely agree” also uses an incorrect verb pattern. Articles and sentence boundaries are frequently missing, and the final clause beginning “after 2000” is unfinished. These errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences, using articles and past-tense forms consistently, and separating ideas with accurate punctuation. Then add a few controlled complex sentences using “because,” “although,” or “which.”

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