Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The college cafe shares the plan and shows the before and after plan. There are 2 plans first one plan is after and the second one is after. This after plan change the some setting and looks like different.

First plan is right side is entrence gate and and left side bin and toilets. Now, see the right side two room and this rooms is staff dining rooms. In the middle area covers the tables and chairs. Now, Some go to straight and then see right corner side is another gate and this room is serving area (all food & drink) and the kitchen. This plan is before cafe plan.

Now, the second one plan is today cafe plan. In the right side is two gates one gate is entrence and the second gate is exit gate. Now enter the gate and see the left side is same as before plan but this plan have two more gates. The two gates is outdoor seating area and barbecue area.In the middle same as before plan table and chairs and the right side have two rooms one room is take away food and the second one is coffee bar. See the straight wall and this side have is salad bar. Now see the right side of cafe. This area have one gate and 2 places first one hot meals and second one is kitchen. Moreover, see the both plan and the second plan is more worth it because second plan have many new things and more sitting area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the new take-away and coffee-bar rooms, the salad bar, and outdoor seating with a barbecue. However, the description is only partly accurate and the overview is unclear: the opening says the first plan is “after” and the second is “after,” then later corrects this. Some locations are misreported, notably saying the bin and toilets are on the left in the first plan, when they are on the eastern/right side. The final opinion that the new plan is “more worth it” is not an appropriate summary of the main changes. State clearly that the kitchen and toilets remain, while the former staff dining rooms and serving arrangement have been reorganised and outdoor facilities added.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction followed by separate descriptions of the two plans. This gives the reader some sense of sequence, and phrases such as “Now” and “Moreover” attempt to connect points. However, progression is often difficult to follow because the description repeatedly shifts between directions and features, and “Now” is used mechanically. The opening also contradicts itself about which plan is before or after, while references such as “this area” and “this side” are not always clear. Organise the report around an overview and then grouped changes—for example, interior changes, retained facilities, and additions outside—using precise location references and fewer repeated transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant labels accurately, including “staff dining rooms,” “tables and chairs,” “take away food,” and “salad bar,” so the reader can recognise several features. However, the vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “side,” “room,” “gate,” and “see.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a plan description: “entrence gate” should be “entrance,” and “more worth it” does not express a suitable objective comparison. Spelling errors such as “entrence” and “cafe” also reduce precision. Build a more varied set of location and change terms, such as “along the eastern wall,” “was replaced by,” and “was added,” and use the plan’s labels consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate some basic information through simple sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors occur frequently in sentence formation and agreement, as in “This after plan change the some setting” and “The two gates is outdoor seating area.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and verb forms, for example “the right side have two rooms” and “this rooms is staff dining rooms.” Several sentences are joined or punctuated poorly, particularly “barbecue area.In the middle,” which makes the description harder to read. Practise accurate simple clauses first, then combine them with controlled comparisons such as “The staff rooms were replaced by a coffee bar and takeaway area.”

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