Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans illustrate college cafe before advancement and now how it apppears now. It have lot of changes which can attract many more students.

overall before construction they have no sitting place and now it have excellent seatings. Now it can also provide hot meals but in the beginning it did not had any kind of place where students can get hot meals.

On the one hand the main and very impressive change that has been done iis that now students can take seats for feat meal and other recipes. The second vast change is that students can get hot meals from kitchen before they did not have this opportunity it can improve their attention to cafe. Students can get barbecue and salad from kitchen but in past they had not any thing like this.At the end staff dinning room is totally converted in coffee bar and for food and also now students have more exiting and entrance facilities. After all it can improve the revenue of cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify some genuine changes, including the addition of hot meals, a salad bar, barbecue facilities and outdoor seating, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms into food and drink areas. However, the response only partially reports the plans: it does not clearly describe the unchanged kitchen, central seating area or toilets, nor the recycling bins replacing the single bin. The overview is also inaccurate when it says there was “no sitting place” before, since the original plan already shows tables and chairs. Several claims are unsupported or unclear, such as students getting “barbecue and salad from kitchen.” Focus on the physical layout and compare what was removed, retained and added, rather than predicting effects on students or revenue.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an opening statement is followed by an overview and then a paragraph describing changes, and phrases such as “On the one hand” and “At the end” attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the response moves between features without a reliable order. For example, hot meals are repeated, while the conversion of the staff rooms and the new outdoor area are compressed into the final sentence. Some linking phrases do not express the relationship accurately, and references such as “it” are unclear. Group the information by location or by what was retained, removed and added, and use straightforward comparisons to make the sequence easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “coffee bar,” “salad” and “outdoor seating,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate for describing a plan. “Advancement” is not a natural way to describe a redesign, “excellent seatings” is awkward, and “more exiting and entrance facilities” does not clearly convey the new doors and outdoor area. Spelling errors such as “apppears,” “dinning” and “iis” also reduce accuracy. Use precise terms for layout changes and facilities, and check spelling and word forms. Avoid evaluative or speculative phrases such as “very impressive” when a neutral description is more suitable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “It have lot of changes,” “they did not had,” and “staff dinning room is totally converted,” which show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms and tense. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing or unclear, as in “college cafe before advancement and now how it apppears now.” Some clauses run together, particularly in the sentence beginning “The second vast change,” making the relationships between ideas hard to track. Practise accurate past-versus-present comparisons and build shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex ones.

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