Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This plan show the difference batween the cafe condition before redesign and after.Everything in world becomes change with the passage of time.In this plan, there is great difference batween both of them.

If we look at the first picture,the cafe is looking very simple and very limited amount of objects in it.The kitchen and then surving area for food and drinks.There is seperate place for staff and there is large voulme place for the patrons.On the right side of this small portion is fixed for bin.After that there are toilets.

Later on,they made changes in this small resturant and created it better than older ones.They add more things in their menu and also add vegaterian dishes in it.The most attractive object they add in cafe is outdoor seating so that cutomer can also enjoy the external environment.

To conclude,with the passage of time everything is changed.It is good thing that we should make changes in ourselves and to make our parsonality more batter.Individuals also like changes things and also want to adopt that environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the before-and-after comparison and mention several relevant features, including the kitchen, serving area, staff space, bin, toilets and new outdoor seating. However, the report only minimally describes the plans: key changes such as the take-away section, coffee bar, salad bar, recycling bins and barbecue are omitted. Some claims are not supported by the visual, including that the café added vegetarian dishes or expanded its menu. The final comments about people changing their personalities are unrelated to the map and take space away from reporting its features. To improve, give a concise overview of the main redesign, then accurately compare the important internal changes and the new outdoor area without adding speculation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the original café to the redesigned one, and paragraph breaks help distinguish the description from the conclusion. However, progression is limited: the first description lists features loosely, while the later paragraph gives only a general impression rather than a clear account of what changed. Linking phrases such as “After that” and “Later on” are used, but they do not establish precise relationships between locations or changes. The conclusion shifts to general statements about change and personality, weakening the focus. Organise the report into an overview and a systematic comparison—for example, describe the northern and western areas, then the central and southern areas—and use clear references to the two plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some relevant map terms such as “kitchen,” “staff,” “bin” and “outdoor seating.” However, several spelling and word-choice errors make the description less clear, including “batween,” “surving,” “voulme,” “resturant” and “cutomer.” Phrases such as “very simple,” “more things” and “better than older ones” are vague and do not precisely describe the redesign. “External environment” is also an awkward way to refer to the outdoor seating area. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing plans, such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” “along the western wall” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “This plan show” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “there is great difference” is missing an article. Several sentences are fragments, including “The kitchen and then surving area for food and drinks” and “After that there are toilets,” rather than complete descriptions of the plan. Tense and sentence construction are also inconsistent in “they made changes … They add more things.” Punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases, and spacing after full stops is inconsistent. Practise complete past-tense sentences and use a few controlled comparison structures, such as “The staff rooms were replaced by a coffee bar and a take-away section.”

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