Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given plans illustrates a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Overeall,its clear that before redesign it countains 6 rooms and now it countains 7 rooms so the Barbecue is appreated.

Regarding before redesign, the cafe had kitchen and serving area and there is one door in the center,countains the tables and chairs with staff dining food and toilets wheras, the cafe today the kitchen is not changed in contrast the serving area was beem changed by hot meals and in the center there is table and chair it appreated a new thing which was a salad bar and the staff dining was chbaged by the take away food and coffe bar also the recycling bin then outside, it build a new acitvities which was barbecue and the people seat in outdoor.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main change from staff dining rooms to takeaway food and a coffee bar, and note that the kitchen remains while hot meals replace the former serving area. You also mention the salad bar and new outdoor facilities, so the response is relevant and includes several key features. However, the overview that the café has “6 rooms” and “7 rooms” is not a useful or accurate summary of the redesign, and important details such as the outdoor tables and the unchanged toilets are not clearly reported. The response is also below the required 150 words: it contains 125 words, with 12 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. Develop the overview around the major functional changes and describe the main locations more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an overview of the plans to features before and after the redesign. Linking expressions such as “Regarding before redesign” and “in contrast” show an attempt to organise comparisons. However, most information is compressed into one long sentence, making the progression difficult to follow; the final sentence joins several changes with “also” and “then” without clear boundaries. Some references are unclear, for example “one door in the center” and “it build a new activities.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the two plans, and group related changes together. Shorter sentences and more precise links such as “whereas,” “in addition,” and “outside” would make the comparison easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “serving area,” “tables and chairs,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the description hard to understand: “Overeall,” “countains,” “appreated,” “chbaged,” and “acitvities.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “staff dining food” and “the people seat in outdoor.” Choose accurate plan vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For example, describe facilities as being “replaced by” or “added,” and refer to “staff dining rooms” and “outdoor seating.” This would make the account clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to compare the two plans using structures such as “before redesign” and “in contrast,” but the response relies mainly on basic clauses and one heavily joined sentence. Frequent errors in sentence structure and verb forms make the relationships between changes unclear. For example, “The given plans illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the serving area was beem changed” uses an incorrect verb construction. The clause beginning “Regarding before redesign” is not formed naturally, and the long sentence beginning “the cafe had kitchen” lacks clear punctuation and grammatical control. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences, checking articles and agreement, and use accurate past and present forms to distinguish the earlier plan from the current one.

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