Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The maps illustrate a college cafe before if was renovation and how it looks now. Overall, the maps show as a cafe before redesign and it looks today cafe . it will be significantly changed to a cafe designs.

Cafe before redesign, it was a simple design in before cafe. they are western part in serving area and kitchen . cafe mid part of big hall going to tables and chairs . toilet going to eastern part of cafe.

In today, cafe are significantly changed in before cafe designs. kitchen, tables and chsir , toilet are no changed in places of cafe. however serving area are demolished and built in hot meals. Also , staff dining rooms are demolish and then new cafe replaced to take away food and coffee bar . they are also outside of cafe seating in tables and chairs for outside cafes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the before-and-after comparison and report several relevant changes, including the kitchen and toilets remaining in place, the serving area becoming a hot-meals counter, and the former staff rooms being replaced by takeaway food and a coffee bar. However, the overview is unclear and repetitive, and some details are inaccurate or too vague: the serving area is not described as being in the western part, and the new salad bar, recycling bins, and barbecue are omitted. The outdoor seating is mentioned, but its location and features are not clearly reported. The response is also four words below the required minimum. To improve, give a clear overview of the main changes and select more precise, representative details from both plans.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction and overview are followed by a description of the original café and then the redesigned one. This gives the reader some sense of sequence, and “however” helps signal a contrast. Nevertheless, progression is uneven because the opening repeats the same idea (“before redesign” and “looks now”) without clearly summarising the main changes. Some sentences are difficult to follow, such as “cafe mid part of big hall going to tables and chairs,” and the final paragraph combines several changes without clear ordering. Use one focused overview, then group details by area or by what stayed and what changed. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise linking would make the comparison easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “tables and chairs,” “staff dining rooms,” “hot meals,” and “coffee bar,” so the reader can recognise several features of the plans. However, the range is limited and key words are repeated, especially “cafe,” “changed,” and “design.” Several choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “demolish” for a completed change and “outside cafes” for the outdoor seating area; “western part” also misidentifies the serving area’s position. Spelling errors such as “chsir” and “if” further reduce precision. Build a wider set of accurate terms for plan changes and locations, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe both plans and make comparisons, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between features unclear. Examples include “The maps show as a cafe,” “they are western part,” and “kitchen, tables and chsir, toilet are no changed,” where sentence structure, articles, agreement, and verb forms are problematic. Tense and passive forms are also inconsistent: “are demolish” and “new cafe replaced” do not clearly express completed changes. Most sentences follow a simple pattern, with little accurate use of more varied structures. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and past passive forms, for example, “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway counter and a coffee bar.”

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