Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This layout show the basic information of cafe before and after redesign . And this map also show of all the changes and amenties add for students

In first layout indicate intrance in big hall of cafe where table and chairs were arranged and two room for staff to eat and dine with small bin and also a basic kitchen .The before cafe contain no Salad bar .The cafe need renovation which have modern design for new students and also outdoor siting

.Moving on the second layout; it can be observed that many of the facilities are now added after the renovation of cafe lik

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises that the plans compare the café before and after redesign and mentions several relevant features, including the staff dining rooms, tables and chairs, kitchen, and the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main changes or accurately describe the current layout: the second plan is left unfinished at “many of the facilities are now added … lik”. Important changes such as the take-away food and coffee bar, hot-meals counter, recycling bins, and barbecue are not reported. The claim that the café “need renovation” also adds an unsupported purpose. The response is 45 words below the required minimum, further limiting its coverage. Develop a complete comparison based on the plans.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response chronologically, moving from “In first layout” to “Moving on the second layout”. This gives the reader a general sense of the intended comparison. However, the response has no distinct overview or well-developed paragraphs, and the second-plan discussion breaks off mid-sentence, so the progression is incomplete. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “layout” and the transition “Moving on”. Group the changes into a clear overview and supporting details—for example, describe the altered service areas together, then the new outdoor facilities. Complete each sentence and use references such as “the former staff rooms” to connect the two plans more clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “kitchen”, “table and chairs”, “staff”, “Salad bar” and “outdoor seating”, so the basic subject is identifiable. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors reduce clarity, such as “amenties”, “intrance”, “siting” and “lik”. Phrases such as “basic information” and “many of the facilities are now added” are vague or unnatural for describing a plan. Use precise terms from the diagram and verbs that describe change, such as “was replaced by”, “was added” and “remained in the same position”. This would make the comparison more accurate and help avoid repetition of general words such as “cafe” and “layout”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a longer sentence beginning “In first layout indicate…”, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range remains limited. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms appear in “This layout show” and “this map also show”, while “The before cafe contain” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear noun phrase. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “In first layout” and the opening sentence, which is joined awkwardly with “And”. The final sentence is incomplete, ending with “lik”, so its structure cannot be understood. Practise complete, controlled sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, then use a few clear comparison structures such as “The staff rooms were replaced by…”

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