Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two diagram below demonstrate a college cafe before and after the renovation. Overall, the cafe kitchen, toilets and tables and chairs remain the same place after redesign while there are huge change in outdoor of cafe.

At the beginning, the serving area attach to kitchen replaced with hot meals. Further, staff dining rooms change into coffee bar and facility of take away food. In addition, toilets remain same and bin change into recycling bins, there are new renovate the salad bar in th front of the door of kitchen area. Additionall, the outdoor system is new in that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad before-and-after comparison and report several relevant changes, including the serving area becoming a hot-meals counter, the staff dining rooms being replaced by takeaway and coffee facilities, and the bin becoming recycling bins. However, the response addresses the plan only partially: the overview that the kitchen, toilets and seating remain in the same places is useful, but the major outdoor changes are left unfinished in “the outdoor system is new in that”. The salad bar’s location is also described inaccurately as being “in the front of the door of kitchen area”; it is along the western wall. The response is 51 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the limited coverage. Develop the outdoor seating and barbecue changes and report the main features more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening overview is followed by a paragraph describing individual changes. Linking expressions such as “Overall”, “Further” and “In addition” show an effort to connect points. However, progression is difficult to follow because several changes are compressed into one paragraph, and the final sentence stops at “in that”, leaving the outdoor comparison incomplete. Some links are also awkward or repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “In addition” and “Additionally”. Use clear paragraphing for the overview and the main changes, then group related features—for example, changes inside the café and additions outside. Complete each sentence and use linking words only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “renovation”, “serving area”, “coffee bar”, “take away food” and “recycling bins”. These terms show an adequate basic range for the task. However, several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “huge change in outdoor of cafe”, “facility of take away food” and “outdoor system”. There are also spelling errors, including “th” and “Additionall”, and “new renovate” does not express the intended meaning clearly. These issues make parts of the description less precise. Build a small set of accurate plan-description phrases, such as “was converted into”, “was added along the western wall” and “an outdoor seating area”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview beginning “Overall” and the sentence linking the serving area with the hot-meals counter. However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. For example, “The two diagram below demonstrate” has problems with plural agreement, while “the cafe kitchen, toilets and tables and chairs remain the same place” lacks a clear grammatical relationship between the items and their locations. In “there are new renovate the salad bar”, the verb construction is faulty, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate past-tense passive forms for changes, such as “the staff dining rooms were replaced by…”, alongside clear present-tense statements for unchanged features. Check articles, agreement and sentence completion.

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