Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans elucidate information of college cafe before it was redesinned and how it looks now. Writw down the main feature and discuss cafe before redesign and cafe today. They are many changes recoded before and today.
Overall, enter to the main entrance left side has a dust bin replaced to a recycling bins. Toilets located at same place and Staff dining rooms replaced into Take away food counter and coffee bar counter. Tables and chairs are located at same place in main hall of cafe.
On the other hand, Kitchen located at same place but, serving area who serve all food and drinks replace in to Hot meals counter. Salad bar counter added in the main hall of cafe. In addition, They are added outdoor seating area outside the cafe and start a barbecue business outside the cafe.They added five tabels and 26 chairs outside the cafe for nightout. Nowaday, they have many changes recoded before redesign and today.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You identify several important changes and similarities: the kitchen and toilets remain in place, the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee counters, and outdoor seating and a barbecue are added. This gives the reader a relevant account of the redesign. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. The entrance is not described as being on the left, and the plan shows four outdoor tables, not five; the stated 26 chairs and use “for nightout” are not supported by the visual. The overview also repeats that there were many changes rather than clearly summarising the main transformation. To strengthen the response, report the new southern access and outdoor area accurately, and distinguish the key additions from features that stayed unchanged.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, an overview-like paragraph, and a further paragraph describing changes. This helps separate some information, and phrases such as “In addition” signal an added point. However, progression is not consistently clear: “On the other hand” does not introduce a genuine contrast, while the final sentence repeats the general claim that many changes occurred. The opening also includes instructions to the reader (“Writw down the main feature”), which interrupts the report’s purpose. Group the information more systematically—for example, unchanged features and indoor changes first, followed by the new outdoor facilities—and use linking expressions only when their relationship is accurate.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “recycling bins,” “Toilets,” “Tables and chairs,” “outdoor seating area,” and “barbecue.” These terms make several features recognisable. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are awkward, such as “enter to the main entrance,” “dust bin,” “barbecue business,” and “many changes recoded.” Spelling errors, including “redesinned,” “Writw,” and “tabels,” also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise plan-description language and avoid adding interpretations such as a business or nighttime use when the plan only labels facilities. Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations would make the description easier to follow.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response communicates several basic comparisons, but grammatical control is weak and sentence patterns are mostly simple or incomplete. For example, “Toilets located at same place” lacks a finite verb and an article, while “Kitchen located at same place but, serving area … replace in to Hot meals counter” has problems with sentence structure, tense, and punctuation. There are also errors in agreement and verb forms, as in “They are added outdoor seating area.” These issues sometimes make relationships between features difficult to understand. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use the past tense for changes and the present tense for the current layout. A few accurate complex sentences using “while” or “whereas” would add range.
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