Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plan below shows the transformation of cafe before reconstruction and after construction.In this I will examine the plan and highlight the points and make comparsions where information is relevant.So firstly kitchen area are almost same only one change.The serving areas convert into hot meals area.Furthermore before cafe tables and chairs area are so large and so much capacity for peoples to sit and eat meals there.After redesign they installed salad bar at right side of cafe and replaced bin into recycling bins.Now it also a large area for tables and chairs.Moreover the toilets area area are same at the right bottom of cafe and install entry door at left side of toilets area and at the left bottom of cafe is exit door.Exit door left side is barbecue area is installed for barbecue lover and they install outdoor seating for people who buys barbeque and anyother items and sit there eat freshly.The new look of cafe attract many peoples.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the kitchen remaining broadly similar, the serving counter becoming a hot-meals area, the bin being replaced by recycling bins, and outdoor seating and a barbecue being added. However, the account only partially covers the plans: it omits the new takeaway-food and coffee-bar sections, and the salad bar is placed on the right rather than the western (left) wall. The description of the new doors and barbecue location is also inaccurate or unclear. There is no concise overview that groups the main changes, and comments such as “attract many peoples” are speculation rather than information shown in the plans. Focus on the most significant changes and report their positions precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly understandable order, moving from the kitchen and serving area to the seating, bins, toilets, and outdoor facilities. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “Now” help signal additions and comparisons. However, the writing is presented as one continuous paragraph, with no clear overview followed by organised details. Several transitions are mechanical, and the sequence becomes difficult to follow in the final sentences, especially “Exit door left side is barbecue area…” Group related changes together and use clear references to the before and current plans. A short opening overview and separate paragraphs for internal and external changes would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “serving area,” “recycling bins,” “toilets,” and “outdoor seating,” so the reader can recognise the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal, such as “reconstruction,” “for barbecue lover,” and “freshly.” Repetition of “area” and “install” also makes the description less precise. Some spelling and word-form errors, including “comparsions,” “peoples,” and “anyother,” are noticeable. Use the labels from the plans and practise precise verbs for changes, such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “remained.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas with longer sentences, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “kitchen area are almost same” has problems with agreement and articles, while “The serving areas convert into hot meals area” uses an incorrect verb form and singular/plural pattern. The final section contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation, making relationships between ideas hard to understand. Articles, subject–verb agreement, tense, and sentence boundaries need particular attention. Practise writing short, accurate comparison sentences first, such as “The kitchen remains in the same position, but the serving counter now offers hot meals,” then combine ideas only when the grammar remains controlled.

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