Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this essay we are going to summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make the comparisons of college cafe before and after the redesigned.

Before the redesigned of college cafe the entrance and exit is on the east side, kitchen is on the northwest side and serving area of food is also along with them, staff dining room is on north side and when you end in cafe on left hand their is bin and toilets. Futhermore in center their is tables and chairs every where.

After the redesign they will add the outdoor sitting on the south side of caafe and also add coffebar and take away food option which is located in north side. Furthermore add salad bar on the west side of cafe and remove the staff dining room, one thing more the also add the barbecue section with outerdoor seating area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several major changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the coffee bar and takeaway counter, and the salad bar, and you compare these with the former staff dining rooms. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the bin and toilets are in the bottom-right area, not “on left hand,” and the serving counter is not described as being alongside the kitchen. The overview is also limited, with no clear summary of what remained unchanged, such as the kitchen, central tables and chairs, and toilets. The response contains 138 words, below the required 150; the 12 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Add accurate detail and a concise overview to cover the plan more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic chronological structure: the second paragraph describes the original café and the third explains the redesign. This makes the broad comparison possible, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “After the redesign” help signal progression. However, the ideas within each paragraph are crowded into long, loosely connected sentences, and “Furthermore” is repeated without clearly showing how the next detail relates to the previous one. The phrase “when you end in cafe on left hand” also makes the sequence and location difficult to follow. Use separate sentences to group features by area or by what changed, and use clear references such as “the former staff dining rooms” to connect the two plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “entrance and exit,” “north side,” “outdoor seating,” “coffee bar,” and “salad bar.” These terms allow the reader to recognise several of the changes. However, the range is limited and some expressions are imprecise or repetitive, such as “add” for several different changes and “tables and chairs every where” for the central seating area. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “Futhermore,” “caafe,” “coffebar,” and “outerdoor,” which reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of plan-description verbs, such as “remain,” “be replaced by,” and “be added,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, and the response uses basic present and future forms to contrast the plans. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms occur frequently. For example, “the entrance and exit is” should use a plural verb, while “Before the redesigned of college cafe” has an incorrect noun construction. The sentence beginning “After the redesign they will add” also shifts to a future form even though the plan shows the café as it looks now. Several clauses run together, making relationships between details unclear. Practise accurate comparative structures such as “The staff dining rooms were replaced by…” and use full stops to separate each change.

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