Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans illustrating a comparison between a college cafe before redesigning and after.

Overall, it is evident from the plans that now the cafe has more facilities than before. The cafe extended the outdoor seating and a barbecue place. Most of the things changed except the kitchen, toilet, and indoor seating place.

The cafe transforms a serving area for all kinds of food and drink to a place for serving hot meals. One staff dining room became a place for ordering take away food and the other one became a coffee bar. The place for bins extended and a salad bar aded in left side of the cafe.

In the outdoor area, the cafe has now more seating place with five more tables and chairs. In the left outer side of the cafe a barbecue take place. Two doors added in two opposite sides of the cafe to use as entery and exit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation and give a clear overview: the café gains outdoor seating and a barbecue, while the kitchen, toilets and central seating remain. You also report several key changes accurately, including the hot-meals counter, takeaway and coffee-bar areas, and the salad bar. This covers the task well, with some detail beyond a basic summary. However, a few points are unclear or inaccurate: “the place for bins extended” does not describe the change to recycling bins, and the outdoor area has four tables, not five more. The statement about “two doors” on “two opposite sides” is also misleading; the new doors are on the south wall. More precise reporting of these details would make the account more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing indoor and outdoor changes. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the plans, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In the outdoor area” help signal the stages of the description. Some progression is less clear, however. The sentence about the bins and salad bar combines separate changes, while “Two doors added in two opposite sides” appears after the barbecue without a clear link to the building layout. Use more precise location-based sequencing—for example, describe the north, west, east and south areas in turn—and connect each comparison explicitly to its former arrangement. This would make cohesion less abrupt and mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “serving area,” “hot meals,” “take away food,” “coffee bar” and “outdoor seating,” so the main changes are usually understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording with “transforms” and “extended.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “the place for bins extended” does not convey that the bin was replaced by recycling bins, and “a barbecue take place” is not an appropriate description of a facility. Spelling errors such as “aded” and “entery,” along with repeated use of “place,” limit accuracy and flexibility. Choose specific nouns such as “area,” “counter” and “facility,” and use standard forms like “takeaway” and “barbecue area” to describe the plan more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including the overview sentence beginning “Most of the things changed except…” and the comparison “One staff dining room became… and the other one became…”. The main meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening fragment, “The plans illustrating a comparison…,” needs a main verb; “The café extended the outdoor seating” uses an unsuitable tense for describing the current plan; and “Two doors added” is missing a passive verb. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction, as in “a barbecue place” and “a barbecue take place.” Use consistent present or present-perfect forms for the redesigned layout, and check that each sentence has a complete verb phrase and clear subject.

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