Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This two degram illustrate the plan of a college cafe when they are underconstructure, and also show who they look before when construction is completed.

Overall,the buldinging of cafe before it design completed includes a kitchen,serving area,and setting area foe both stidents and teacher,followed up, the design before completed and todays the cafe infrastucture is looking stunning in which the serving area is seprate foe doffernt foods and also inslude the outdoor seating.

On one hand of the cafe include all the essentail things like kitchen,seating area , and toilets.while the cafe today are more advance and thier embassay are good for both indoor and outdoor.

comparison of both cafe are, today cafe has different food servivg aresa as the bofe cafe donot provide this facility. Moreover,todays cafe seating area is increaseand add outdoor seating for barbecue today cafe embayance is advanced

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad change from a basic café layout to one with more food options and outdoor seating, and you mention features such as the kitchen, toilets, seating, and barbecue. However, the response only partially reports the plans: it does not clearly explain that the staff dining rooms became a takeaway-food section and coffee bar, or that a salad bar and recycling bins were added. Some claims are unclear or unsupported, such as saying the seating area increased. The overview is difficult to interpret, and the comparison is not developed into a clear account of the main changes. The response is also 142 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a concise overview and describe the key changes accurately and specifically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an overview and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “On one hand,” and “Moreover.” These signals show an effort to group and compare information. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the opening, overview, and later comparison repeat similar points without a clear sequence through the café’s changes. Several sentences run together, and punctuation does not reliably separate ideas, as in “toilets.while the cafe today…” The phrase “On one hand” also introduces no clear contrasting second side. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and the main changes, then group related features—for example, changes inside the café and additions outside—and use simpler, more precise links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response attempts task-related vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “serving area,” “seating area,” “outdoor seating,” and “barbecue,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make meaning difficult to recover, including “degram,” “underconstructure,” “embassay,” and “embayance.” Some expressions are also imprecise for describing a plan: “looking stunning” is evaluative rather than factual, and “different food servivg aresa” does not clearly name the facilities shown. Aim for accurate labels from the plan and neutral map language, such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “remained unchanged.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise nouns will make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some comparison structures, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “This two degram illustrate” has problems with number agreement and verb form, while “the cafe today are more advance” has agreement and sentence-structure errors. Clauses are frequently joined without clear punctuation, as in “toilets.while the cafe today…,” and the final comparison lacks a complete, controlled sentence structure. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships between features hard to understand. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses: “The kitchen remained in the same position, while the former staff rooms were converted into a takeaway area and coffee bar.” Check articles, plurals, agreement, and sentence boundaries.

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