Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given plans indicate the desing of a college cafe before and after renovation.And there are several changes made in the cafe and some places are left as it was.

Overall,the kitchen,recycling bin,toilets,tables and chairs is in the same position as it was.And checking at the cafe before there was a staff dining rooms and a food and drinks serving area.After the remodeling salad bar,take away food and coffee bar,hot meals and a beautiful outdoor seating with barbecue was added.

Acoording to the plan,the college cafe had less facilities but now its way much better.Both the kitchen remained same even after the makeover,and also the toilets and the tables and chair in the indoor stayed unchanged.As for the bin it was remained same but it became little more larger than before.Furthermore,the serving area and staff dining room continued to be same but the usage had been changed,it changed to hotmeals and the other one as take away food and coffee bar.After the refurbishmet a salad bar was added.Moreover,there was an outdoor seating arranged by the college after the redesigning of model and also a barbecue are near that.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast between the original café and the redesigned one, including the new salad bar, takeaway and coffee facilities, hot-meal counter, and outdoor seating with a barbecue. You also note that the kitchen, toilets, and central tables and chairs remain. However, some details are inaccurate: the bin was replaced by recycling bins, not made larger, and the former staff dining rooms did not simply continue with changed usage; they were replaced by takeaway and coffee sections. The overview is relevant, but the claim that the café has “less facilities” before is vague, and several changes are not clearly located. Report the key transformations precisely and distinguish what stayed from what was replaced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to further comparisons, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” help signal development. However, progression is weakened by repetition: the unchanged kitchen, toilets, and seating are mentioned in both the overview and the final paragraph, while the same former facilities are revisited without a clear distinction between replacement and continued use. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the other one” and “that.” Organise the details into a clearer sequence—for example, unchanged indoor features, replaced counters and rooms, then additions outside—and use precise references to make the relationships easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “renovation,” “serving area,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor seating.” This gives you enough range to communicate the main changes, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “way much better,” “beautiful outdoor seating,” and “the usage had been changed.” “Bin” also misses the more specific label “recycling bins,” and “remodeling of model” does not express the redesign clearly. Spelling errors such as “desing,” “Acoording,” and “refurbishmet” are noticeable. Aim for neutral, accurate map language, such as “was replaced by,” “was converted into,” and “was added,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “but” and a time clause beginning “after the redesigning.” However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “the kitchen, recycling bin, toilets, tables and chairs is” should use a plural verb, while “it was remained same” has an incorrect verb construction. The opening also runs two sentences together (“renovation.And”), and “Both the kitchen remained same” has faulty number and article use. Practise accurate past-tense passive forms for changes, such as “was replaced by,” and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation in each sentence.

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