Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given chart illustrates the information of collage cafe that how it looks now and how it looked before redesigned.

When took the eyes on the chart in which cafe is not redesigned. We start from door their is only one door in right side of cafe when any person enter he see tables in the front of him aand dustbin is near the outdoor and toilets are in the corner of cafe when he go in middle place of cafe then he see staff dining rooms at right hand side of him if he go forward and look at right hand side then he see serving area from where we take all type of food and drinks and also see one door which open in kitchen. respectively.

At the present time their so many goods are replaced and added like their two new doors are added, outdoor seating added, barbecue added, saladd bar added in the left side, new dustbins added, staff dining rooms eil replaced as serving area of food and with coffee bar, serving area is replaced with hot meals. At this time cafe look is fully changed so many new things are added for costumers.

To give better service and experince cofe owner will replace many objects and many new goods are added.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the salad bar, recycling bins, and the conversion of the former staff rooms. However, the description is only partly accurate and does not give a clear, balanced account of the plans. For example, you say there is “only one door in right side,” whereas the original plan shows a two-door entrance on the upper-right wall; the new doors are on the southern wall. You also confuse the former serving area with the staff rooms when describing what was replaced. The final claim that the café is “fully changed” overstates the redesign, since the kitchen, central tables and chairs, and toilets remain. A concise overview of what stayed and what changed, followed by accurate comparisons, would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has some organisation: it first describes the former café and then turns to the present layout, so the reader can recognise the intended comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow. The long description beginning “When took the eyes on the chart” moves between doors, seating, toilets, staff rooms, and the serving area without a clear spatial route, and “respectively” does not clarify the sequence. The present-day changes are also compressed into one sentence with repeated “added” and “replaced.” Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the two plans, and group details by location or by what remained versus what changed. More precise linking and reference would make the comparison easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “outdoor seating,” “barbecue,” “salad bar,” and “serving area,” which helps communicate the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “take the eyes on the chart,” “new goods,” and “for costumers.” Repetition of “added” and “replaced” also makes the account less precise. Spelling errors such as “collage,” “saladd,” “experince,” and “cofe” are noticeable and can slow the reader. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing plans—such as “located,” “remained,” “was converted into,” and “was added”—and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and conditional clauses, but the structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “When took the eyes on the chart,” “if he go in middle place,” and “staff dining rooms eil replaced as serving area.” Verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction are not controlled consistently; for instance, “cafe look is fully changed” lacks a natural grammatical structure. Several sentences run on, particularly the sequence beginning “When any person enter,” with punctuation that does not clearly separate ideas. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add controlled clauses: for example, “The staff rooms were replaced by a takeaway counter and a coffee bar.”

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