Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This plan illustrates the layout of a college cafe before and after it was redesigned following the renovation.

Overall it can be seen before the renovation in midst staff dining rooms can be seen which was later replaced with food shop and a coffee car further a major change can be seen of a barbecue place outside with outdoor sitting while tables and chairs area retained.

Initially before the renovation at the upper section a kitchen can be seen along side a serving area for food and drink, side by side in the middle of the cafe a section for tables and chairs is located along with staff dining rooms furthermore at the bottom right corner there is a place for toilets and bin created.

On the other hand after the redesigning many changes have taken place, firstly staff dining rooms have been replaced by takeaway food and a coffee bar, whereas tables and chairs in the middle section remains unchanged and in the up left corner a serving area for food and drink has been made replacing hot meals section. In the left section a salad bar has been added furthermore outside area in the bottom section is now a place for barbecue side by side with outdoor sitting and recycling bins are now introduced following the redesign in the bottom right section with toilets being unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main before-and-after changes and give an overview, noting that the staff dining rooms were replaced and that outdoor seating and a barbecue were added. You also correctly identify the kitchen, central seating, toilets, and the change from a single bin to recycling bins. This meets the task well, with several key features selected and compared. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the current counter is for hot meals, but you say it was replaced by a hot-meals section; the serving area was the earlier feature. The outdoor seating and barbecue are also described as being together, without clearly locating the barbecue to the south-west. More precise comparisons of these changes would make the report more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the earlier and current layouts. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, several long sentences contain too many details, making relationships between features difficult to follow. For example, the overview combines the staff rooms, food shop, coffee bar, barbecue, outdoor seating, and retained tables in one sentence. Linking expressions such as “furthermore” and “on the other hand” are sometimes mechanical or do not clearly signal the relationship between ideas. Use shorter sentences and organise each paragraph by location or by change, with clearer references to the two plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing a plan, including “replaced,” “retained,” “upper section,” and “bottom right corner.” These choices help communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal, such as “coffee car,” “food shop,” “outdoor sitting,” and “a place for toilets and bin created.” “Serving area” is also used for the current layout, although the plan labels this counter “Hot meals.” Aim for precise labels from the diagram and standard map-description phrases such as “outdoor seating area” and “is located.” Check spelling and word forms, especially where a small error changes the intended feature.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “while,” and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, particularly in long sentences that combine several clauses. Examples include “before the renovation in midst staff dining rooms can be seen,” “tables and chairs in the middle section remains unchanged,” and “with toilets being unchanged.” These show problems with sentence construction, subject–verb agreement, and verb forms. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “a place for toilets and bin.” Break up the longer sentences, check that each clause has a clear subject and verb, and review agreement and article use.

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