Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart illustrste to give a information about college cafe before and it was modify to how see in these days.

Overall , it is clear that by selecting and reporting to the sidnificant component to before cafe and how to look after redesigned in now days cafe such as, Kitchen , Seating area and , Hot meals .

On the other to decribe a cafe before redesigned is one enterance to move next is seating area on the opposite site is staff dining room ,In addition to walk one minute is a right corner is service area all food and drink , Morever to go next is have a large kicten .

At secondly , in these days cfe has extremely modify it have massive feature and provided more facilitaties in cafe survice ,Futhermore it have three entrance and a sperate Hot meals room and long seating area to provided tables and chairs, Morever have two large room is Take awayfood and Coffee bar or constructed to Toilets and go outside has big seating area have many tables and chairs the inidividuals come here to enjoy the coffee and make a happy movement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad before-and-after comparison and mention several relevant features, including the kitchen, seating, hot meals, takeaway food, coffee bar and outdoor seating. However, the main changes are not reported clearly or accurately enough: for example, the staff dining rooms were replaced by takeaway and coffee-bar sections, a salad bar was added, and two southern doors lead to the new outdoor area with a barbecue. Some details are confused, such as describing the hot-meals counter as a separate room and saying the toilets were constructed, although they remain in the same corner. The overview is also vague and does not summarise the most important changes. Select the key alterations and describe their locations precisely to make the response more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an opening, an attempted overview and separate descriptions of the earlier and current café, so there is some basic organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and the sequence of locations is often unclear. Phrases such as “On the other to decribe” and “At secondly” do not establish clear relationships between ideas, while “Morever” is repeated without showing how the details connect. The long final sentence combines several changes and an unsupported comment about visitors enjoying coffee, making the layout harder to understand. Use one paragraph for the overview and one for the main comparisons, grouping features by area and using simple, accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing a plan, including “redesigned,” “seating area,” “entrance,” and “provided,” and you try to vary your wording. However, the range is limited and many word choices or spellings make the description difficult to interpret, such as “sidnificant component,” “facilitaties,” “survice,” and “inidividuals.” Some expressions are also unsuitable for a map report: “walk one minute” and “make a happy movement” do not describe spatial changes naturally. Use precise location and change vocabulary, such as “along the western wall,” “was replaced by,” and “was added.” Check spelling and choose standard collocations so the reader can identify each feature without guessing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use some linking clauses, but sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which can obscure the relationships between features. For example, “The chart illustrste to give a information” has an incorrect verb pattern and article, while “it have three entrance” shows problems with subject–verb agreement and plural forms. The sentence beginning “On the other to decribe” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, with spaces before commas and several ideas joined into one sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses. For example: “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway-food section and a coffee bar.”

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