Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map shows the college cafe before and how its look like after redeigned. Now, we make comparison between them.

The first map shows the college cafe before redesigned while, second map shows the some new changing and new additions and how it look like now.

The first map shows that when we enter the cafe there is a small bin with the enterence and on the left side a small toilet here. Furthermore, two staff dining rooms in front of enterence and outside the dining rooms some tables and chairs are settle. While on the right side of cafe one kitchen and serving area are also shows.

The second map shows some changings and addition of new things. Small bin is change into the recycle bin while toilet are remain same. Staff dining rooms changed into two different rooms one is take away food and the other is coffee bar. There is one more addition on left side wall. Kitchen is at the same place but serving area is changed into hot meals. Enterence and exit are added to outdoor seating and barbecue side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important changes, including the conversion of the staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee areas, the change from a general serving area to hot meals, and the replacement of the bin with recycling bins. However, the account only partially covers the plans and does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main transformation. Some locations are misreported: the toilets are in the bottom-right corner, not on the left near the entrance, and the kitchen is on the left rather than the right. The new salad bar and the outdoor seating with its tables are not clearly described; the barbecue is mentioned, but its position and relationship to the new southern doors are unclear. Select the major changes and describe their locations precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: it introduces the comparison, describes the earlier plan, and then moves to the current layout. This gives the reader a general sense of the two stages. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, partly because locations are described inaccurately and partly because several features are compressed into one sentence. Linking words such as “Furthermore” and “while” are attempted, but “While” begins a fragment, and “The second map shows some changings and addition of new things” repeats the introductory idea rather than advancing the description. Organise the details by area—for example, the north wall, central space, and southern exterior—and use clear comparisons to connect each change.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant plan vocabulary, including “staff dining rooms,” “serving area,” “recycle bin,” and “outdoor seating,” so the reader can recognise several features. However, the range is limited and some word choices or forms make the description unclear or unnatural. Examples include “new changing,” “some changings,” “are settle,” and “one more addition on left side wall.” There are also spelling errors such as “redeigned” and “enterence.” Use precise terms for the features shown and vary the language of change, such as “was replaced by,” “was converted into,” and “was added along.” Check spelling and choose natural collocations so that the layout is easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons between the two plans, but errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between features difficult to follow. For example, “how its look like” has an incorrect verb form, while “toilet are remain same” combines incompatible verb forms and has faulty agreement. The sentence beginning “While on the right side…” is incomplete, and “The first map shows that when we enter…” shifts awkwardly into the present and first person. Articles and sentence structure also need attention, as in “one kitchen and serving area are also shows.” Practise complete comparison sentences with consistent past and present forms, such as “The kitchen remains in the same position, while the serving counter has been replaced by a hot-meal counter.”

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