Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given illustrate represent a collage cage before it was redesigned and this looks now.

First of all, redesign of collage cafe, before the north side in kitchen and serving area like food and drink but the now kitchen is a same place and the service area is replaced by hot meals. furthermore, the staff dining rooms was left side beneath on serving area, but today which is exchanging by take away food and coffee bar. next left side was bin it today is replace by recycling bins. further bins opposite right side was nothing elsewhere, today this place redesigned by salad bar.

moreover cafe central side was table and chairs and today it is same thing ,it is not replace. further toilets was beneath in bin ,it was left in south side ,today that is same place and no transformation. Next cafe right of out side today is new design by barbecue and out side area is new develop on outdoor seating.

Overall, the collage cafe is quite development in today. today barbecue, outdoor seating and saladbar is newly develop in collage cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response attempts to describe the changes in the college cafe, but the information is often unclear or inaccurate. While you identify some features like the kitchen, seating, and new additions, the descriptions are frequently confusing (e.g., 'the now kitchen is a same place'). The overview provided at the end is very brief and lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes. To improve, focus on grouping information logically (e.g., what remained the same vs. what was added) and ensure that your descriptions of locations are precise and easy for the reader to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. You use transition words like 'furthermore' and 'moreover', but they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is also problematic; for example, 'it was left in south side' is vague. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one paragraph for permanent features and another for the new additions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'collage cage' instead of 'college cafe', 'exchanging' instead of 'replaced'). You rely on basic descriptors and struggle to use precise terminology for describing spatial changes. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to maps and diagrams, such as 'relocated', 'transformed', 'extended', or 'adjacent to'. Improving your spelling and learning common collocations for describing visual data will significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions, which makes the text difficult to read. For example, 'the staff dining rooms was left side' should be 'the staff dining room was on the left side'. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for missing articles and incorrect verb forms is essential.

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