Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Here we have a detailed plan of the building that has been redesigned recently. Firstly I would like to demonstrate you some key differences such are removing the outdoor seating with barbeque zone from the outside and removing salad bar from the inside. Let me now show you around. When you enter the building from the East side, on your left you may find new recycling bins. Also on in front of the entrace you may now find staff dining rooms, before you could find here take away food or the coffee bar. When you pass the dining rooms, on the right, you may find kitchen area with serving area. Now you may find here all food and drink options, before it was possible to only get here hot meals. And I think here we end our tour. I hope it was useful and not too overwhelming. But if you still have any questions - let me know!

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to adopt the appropriate academic tone required for IELTS Task 1. Instead of providing an objective summary of the changes, the writer uses a conversational, informal style, addressing the reader directly with phrases like 'Let me now show you around' and 'I hope it was useful'. While the response identifies some key changes, such as the removal of the outdoor seating and the salad bar, the overall approach is narrative rather than analytical. To improve, you must remain neutral, avoid personal pronouns, and focus strictly on describing the visual data provided in the diagrams rather than treating the task as a tour guide presentation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is structured as a single paragraph, which is not ideal for an academic report. While there is a basic attempt at logical progression—moving from general differences to specific areas of the cafe—the lack of formal paragraphing and the reliance on informal, conversational transitions ('Let me now show you around', 'And I think here we end our tour') hinder the coherence. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often inappropriate for the task type. To reach a higher band, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs (e.g., an introduction, a summary of main changes, and specific details) and use formal linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast'.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs like 'find' and 'show'. The tone is consistently informal, which is unsuitable for an academic report. There is little evidence of the precise, descriptive vocabulary needed to describe spatial changes or architectural features. For example, instead of 'find', you should use more descriptive terms like 'situated', 'located', or 'replaced'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and plans, such as 'relocated', 'converted', 'expanded', or 'demolished', and avoid conversational fillers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures. There are several errors in word order and preposition usage, such as 'on in front of the entrace' and 'on the right, you may find kitchen area'. The use of 'before you could find here' is also awkward and grammatically imprecise. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the presence of frequent minor errors prevent the response from reaching a higher band. You should practice using passive voice constructions, which are essential for describing changes in plans, such as 'The salad bar was removed' or 'The area has been converted into...'.

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