Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The schematic plans compares the changes of cafe before and after the redesign.

Overall, it is apparent that the staff dining rooms experienced significant development and there have been new barbecue introduced at the side of cafe with several outdoor seating.

To begin with, in the past the serving area served all tyoes of food and drink but now it is transformed into only hot meals. The staff dining rooms underwent major change and has been completely replaced by two services which is take away food and coffee bar. There have been new salad bar established close to entrance of kitchen. The bin is now converted into recycling bins with increased area.

On the other hand, the proportion of tables and chairs remained unchnaged. Furthermore, the toilets went through no remarkable transformation, whereas new barbecue put in place at south entrance and exit of cafe with considerable number of outdoor seating arrangement.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.5
Overall7.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the cafe redesign, including the changes to the serving area, the addition of the barbecue, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms. You provided a clear overview and made relevant comparisons between the 'before' and 'after' states. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide more precise details regarding the spatial layout. For instance, mentioning the specific relocation of the kitchen or the exact nature of the seating changes would strengthen your response. Overall, you have addressed all parts of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

Your essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the cafe's transformation. You use transition signals such as 'To begin with', 'Overall', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader through your points. However, some cohesive devices are used in a slightly mechanical way, and there are minor issues with referencing (e.g., 'the staff dining rooms... has been completely replaced'). Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring consistent pronoun usage would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'schematic plans', 'redesign', and 'transformation'. However, there are several spelling errors ('tyoes', 'unchnaged') and some awkward collocations, such as 'new barbecue introduced at the side of cafe'. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing spatial changes and ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated descriptors for change, such as 'converted', 'relocated', or 'expanded', would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The staff dining rooms... has been', 'There have been new salad bar established') and article usage (e.g., 'at the side of cafe'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are noticeable. To improve, pay closer attention to pluralization and the correct use of articles when describing specific areas of the floor plan.

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