Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The give map illustrates a design of college cafe in the past and after renovation how it looks in present.

Overall, in before time, sitting area is not the part of the cafe but after redesigning outdoor sitting arrangements are make or the students. For the health of pupil's salad bar is also constructed.

To begin with, the time before it was with now, in cafeteria special area is distributed for staff dining rooms which is now replaced with take away food and coffee bar. The place of kitchen and toilets remains same as it was and now it is. Furthermore, apart from the area allotted for tables and chairs, in its west side small salad

bar is constructed

Moreover, the bin area is modified into recycling bin and serving area into hot meals. Along with that, in outside of the cafe barbecue and outside seating arrangements for students is organised at it lacks before

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response provides a clear overview of the main changes, such as the addition of outdoor seating and the salad bar. It successfully identifies the key features of the renovation, including the conversion of the staff dining room and the modification of the serving area. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision in describing the spatial layout. While the main features are covered, the report would benefit from a more structured comparison between the 'before' and 'after' states to ensure all details are fully developed and clearly contrasted for the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific changes. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and some mechanical use of transitions. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the comparison between the past and present is slightly confusing. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would help the progression of ideas feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the changes to the cafe. There are some attempts at topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'renovation', 'arrangements', and 'constructed'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'in before time' and 'is make or the students'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to spatial changes and ensuring that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tense consistency ('is not the part', 'are make', 'it lacks before') and article usage. These errors are noticeable and sometimes impede the flow of the text. The student should focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that the tense used accurately reflects the timeline of the changes described. More attention to basic sentence construction would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of the writing.

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