Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plan show many changes in the cafe.Firstly,i listed the similarities in the design before and today such as the kitchen,toilets,tables and chairs are at the same place.Now i move to the changes such as there is hot meals in place of serving area(all food & drink),there is take away food and coffee bar in place of staff dining rooms,the bin is replaced by recycling bins these are the changes came after cafe redesign.The redesign of cafe includle some new places such as there is a salad bar at the left wall of cafe today.In before redesign there is no barbecue place but in after design there is a barbecue place with some outdoor seating.There is almost three similar places and also three replaced places in cafe today.The main changes are also three which includle outdoor seating with five benches includle two four seater and three six seater in a line of cafe today.There is also two new doors to access outdoor seating.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying key changes, such as the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is essential for a high band score in Task 1. The description is somewhat repetitive and relies on listing features rather than synthesizing the information. While the main features are mentioned, the lack of a formal structure and a clear introductory overview limits the development of the response. To improve, ensure you group information logically and provide a concise summary of the most significant changes at the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Now', the overall flow is mechanical and disjointed. The referencing is often unclear, and the lack of clear logical organization between the 'before' and 'after' states hinders the reader's understanding. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific changes. Using a wider variety of linking words to connect comparisons would also enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing such as 'there is' or 'in place of'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'in after design' and 'in a line of cafe'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. To improve, try to use more descriptive verbs and nouns related to spatial changes, such as 'transformed', 'replaced by', 'relocated', or 'extended', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('the cafe'), prepositions ('in the left wall'), and verb forms ('includle'). Sentence structures are predominantly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence variety. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and the use of capitalization. These errors occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Practicing the use of complex sentences, such as those using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will also help increase your score.
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