Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map shows the information about the college cafe before and after rebuilt.

overall, In the today cafe map there are alot of new places add, and in present there are more facilties rather than past collage cafe map.

It is noticeable that the area of kitchen is still same, but the serving area changed in to hot meals area in present cafe map. Moreover, in past collage cafe map, there were two rooms connected with one door, that rooms for staff dinnig where as those rooms are now used as coffu bar and for take away food.

It is surprising see that in today's cafe map there are big area for outdoor sitting. Thire are two more areas are add in front of recycling bin, one is salad bar and another one is Barbecue. The total area of collage cafe is more in present as compared to past map.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the kitchen, serving areas, and the addition of outdoor seating. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the kitchen remains the same, the description of the changes to the serving area and the new additions (salad bar, barbecue) is a bit simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide a more detailed comparison of the spatial layout changes and ensure the overview clearly highlights the most significant transformation, such as the expansion of the cafe's footprint and the shift toward a more varied dining experience.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'in the today cafe map' or 'in present'. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the flow feel disjointed. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'Moreover' and 'It is noticeable that', the overall structure lacks the sophisticated control required for higher bands. Improving the variety and accuracy of your transition signals will significantly enhance the readability of your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that occasionally impede communication, such as 'rebuilt' instead of 'redesign', 'facilties' (spelling), and 'dinnig' (spelling). You rely on basic descriptors like 'big area' and 'new places'. To improve, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to describing changes, such as 'expanded', 'converted', 'relocated', or 'transformed'. Additionally, ensure you use correct terminology for map features. The current lexical range is sufficient for the task but lacks the precision and flexibility needed for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('the today cafe map'), subject-verb agreement ('there are alot of new places add'), and word order. There is a limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'that rooms for staff dinnig where as those rooms are now used'. These errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency will help improve your accuracy.

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