Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This diagram shows how was the college cafe looks now to compare with before it was redesigned.
Overall, The area of overall cafe is same but they are create new area in that cafe and relocated some area of cafe.
before the redesign cafe there are one area in that they include kitchen and serving area so in today's cafe the kitchen area has same but they remove serving area and build hot meals counter. Staff dining rooms are also removed in today's cafe and they design a take away food or coffeebar.
So the recycling bin has same area but in now day cafe they large that area. And in opposite that they create salad bar and tables and chairs are as usual. They had also no change in toilets area. In today's cafe they build barbecue and along with that also create outdoor seating area for people in these have include outside of cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the removal of the staff dining room and the addition of the barbecue and outdoor seating. However, the report is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes. While the key features are identified, the description of the layout is occasionally confusing, such as the reference to the 'recycling bin' which is not clearly explained in the context of the provided diagram. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most striking transformations rather than just listing changes sequentially. The response meets the minimum length requirement, but the analysis could be more precise in its comparison of the 'before' and 'after' states.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in today's cafe' and 'in that'. The logical flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, making the progression of ideas feel somewhat disjointed. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') to connect your observations more fluidly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, which impacts the overall readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'they are create' and 'they build' are used frequently, which limits the range of expression. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'they large that area' instead of 'they enlarged that area'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise verbs and nouns related to spatial changes, such as 'relocated', 'expanded', 'transformed', or 'converted'. Expanding your range of descriptive language will help you convey the changes more effectively and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'how was the college cafe looks' and 'they are create'. Additionally, sentence structures are often simple or contain errors in word order, such as 'in these have include outside of cafe'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring correct verb forms will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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