Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram given below illustrate a college cafe new design before it was rebulid.
Overall, major changing occur in staff dining rooms that is replace by take away food and also make more space for sitting.
In old structure of cafe has good same for staff but the area for serving is small as compare to space for sitting in cafe. Toilets does not have seperate enterance for it and the bin is also small
however, In new design there is a noticeable changing occur, outdoor setting and it also has barbecue. Student mostly prefer to sit outdoor thats why he focus on take away food and make a seprate place for it, they also make seperate enterance for toilets. They also make coffee bar in the place of staff room. now in new design students has more facilites as compare to older one. They also has more space for sitting.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the addition of the outdoor seating, the coffee bar, and the changes to the toilets. However, the report lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes, and the description is somewhat fragmented. The student attempts to compare the 'before' and 'after' states, but the analysis is hindered by unclear referencing and a lack of precise detail regarding the layout changes. While the main features are identified, the response would benefit from a more structured approach to reporting the spatial changes, ensuring that the comparison is more systematic and easier for the reader to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'however' and 'overall', but they are sometimes applied incorrectly or in a way that does not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when referring to 'it' or 'they', which makes it difficult for the reader to track the specific changes being described. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary cohesion to guide the reader smoothly through the comparison of the two plans.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'make', 'good', and 'small'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'rebulid', 'seperate', and 'enterance', which detract from the overall quality. The student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'outdoor setting' and 'coffee bar', but the range is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of control. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise verbs and adjectives to describe changes, such as 'transformed', 'relocated', or 'expanded', rather than relying on generic verbs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'major changing occur', 'Toilets does not have'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To reach a higher band, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that tenses are used consistently when describing past and present states.
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