Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The ideas given below demonstrate a college cafe before it was reconstructed and how it looks now.
Overall, the diagram of buiding illustrates that there is no huge changes with building but the renovation has made it more spacious. Moreover, It also adds many facilities for the customers.
There are various changes made that makes the look of cafe more attractive. New design looks more attractive as it has huge outdoor sitting plan with the facility of barbecue. inside the shop,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 150 words, reaching only 81 words. Because the task is incomplete, the response fails to report all main features or make necessary comparisons between the two plans. The description is fragmented and stops abruptly, meaning the information is not fully developed or presented in a way that satisfies the requirements of the task. To improve, you must ensure you cover all aspects of the visual data, including specific changes to the layout, seating, and facilities, while ensuring the response meets the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the body paragraphs are not developed. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' are used, but the overall progression of ideas is hindered by the abrupt ending of the text. To improve, you should plan your response to include a clear introduction, a summary of main trends, and two distinct body paragraphs that detail specific changes, using a variety of linking words to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'attractive' and 'looks'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'diagram of buiding' instead of 'diagram of the building' and 'huge outdoor sitting plan' which is not the most natural collocation for a cafe layout. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to use more precise descriptive language related to architectural changes and spatial arrangements.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including 'there is no huge changes' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'makes the look of cafe' (missing article). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and the text is too short to demonstrate a wide range of complex grammatical structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and incorporating a mix of simple and complex sentences to describe the changes between the two plans accurately.
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