Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The map given below illustrates the cafe desigin before and after how it looks like .It show all the development stage of cafe.
overall, looking maps in detailed it shows the progress of the cafe before redesigning and after redesigning.Before redesigning the cafe area is small and there is not effective service and after redesigning the cafe area is big and with better facilities and services.
Before the redesign the kitchen area and serving area (all food and drink)area are small and unmanaged and after redesign it replaced with managed kitchen with well equiped kitchen utensils and the sections of food and drink managed and seperated for each sections .the staff dinning area replaced with take food away and also coffee bar area and the table and chair are unmanaged before and now adays after redesigning it is well managed .before redesigning the cafe the salad section are added for better service for guest .before and after the recycling bins and toilets remains unchanged .after redesigining the cafe barbecue departments are added with large outdoor seating area for visitors or Customers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the kitchen, seating, and new additions like the barbecue area. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and relies on subjective descriptors like 'unmanaged' or 'well managed' rather than objective reporting of the physical changes shown in the diagrams. While the overview is present, it lacks a clear, concise summary of the most significant transformations. The inclusion of details like 'salad section' and 'barbecue departments' shows an attempt to report data, but the overall analysis lacks the precision required for a higher band. To improve, focus on describing the spatial changes and additions more objectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of varied cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often mechanical or missing, making the flow feel disjointed. For example, the frequent use of 'before redesigning' and 'after redesigning' at the start of multiple clauses creates a repetitive rhythm. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the use of punctuation is inconsistent, which affects the overall readability. Improving the use of linking words such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast' would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. Words like 'managed', 'redesigning', and 'area' are used frequently, which restricts the range of expression. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'all the development stage of cafe' and 'well equiped kitchen utensils'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'desigin', 'equiped', 'seperated') prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to spatial layouts and facility upgrades, and ensure careful proofreading to avoid basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'the cafe area'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'it show' instead of 'it shows'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'before and after how it looks like'). Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces missing after periods and inconsistent capitalization. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader and indicate a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction would be beneficial.
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