Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the diagram illustrates how the college has evolved with time .Before it had large kitchen with serving area where food and drinks of different kind were served according to student preferences but now it has hot meals area giving the kitchen spacious space to prepare meal in peaceful and hustle free environment.the staff dinning room in the kitchen before has changed into area for take away food and coffee bar .there is a addition of salad bar in current kitchen which glorifies it with availibility of different varieties of salad that enhaces the taste of basic food.furthermore,there is outdoor sitting area with barbecue section where the students can enjoy outdoor sitting along with delicious roasted food .the toilet remains at the same place .However the space carried by recycling bin has now increased.these changes causes increase in comfort of students but decreases the vacant space
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main features of the redesign, such as the new salad bar, outdoor seating, and the relocation of the kitchen, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have not fully developed the comparisons between the two plans, and the lack of a clear overview paragraph makes it difficult to grasp the main trends at a glance. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the most significant changes in an introductory overview and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a more thorough exploration of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is written as a single block of text, which lacks the necessary paragraphing to guide the reader through the information logically. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often linked in a mechanical or repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'before' and 'now'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult to follow the transition from one area of the cafe to another. To improve, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific features. Use a wider variety of linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on basic descriptors like 'large', 'different', and 'delicious', which do not accurately reflect the formal tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'hustle free environment' (should be 'hassle-free') and 'glorifies it' (which is not appropriate in this context). To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to spatial changes, such as 'expanded', 'relocated', 'converted', or 'integrated', and avoid informal or subjective language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are frequent issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, and inconsistent capitalization at the start of sentences. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'the space carried by recycling bin' (should be 'the space occupied by the recycling bin'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation and capitalization. Incorporating more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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