Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The below schematic diagrams illustrates a cafe in a college before and after renovation.

Overall, I can say that there is a massive change as we can see in the first and second plans that some places/apartments were renamed, some were expanded and many other structures were erected.

In the first design, serving area (all food and drink) was renamed "hot meals" in the second design, same applicable to staff dinning rooms which was changed to two different partitions in the building and named take away food and coffee bar respectively. Also, the Bin apartment in the first design was altered to recycling bins in the second design. Additionally, one can notice that there are so many newly erected structures in the second building that were not seen in the first, like the salad bar, Barbeque, outdoor seating. Contrastively, there are other apartments that were neither redesigned nor renamed: The kitchen was left as it were together with the toilets and the space for tables and chairs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, identifying key changes such as the renaming of areas and the addition of new facilities. However, the report is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. The use of the term 'apartments' to describe sections of a cafe is inaccurate and inappropriate for this context. While the main features are highlighted, the comparison could be more precise; for instance, the description of the kitchen and toilets as 'left as it were' is accurate, but the overall summary lacks a clear focus on the spatial reconfiguration. The response meets the minimum requirements but would benefit from a more professional tone and more precise terminology regarding the layout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for a short report. The use of cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In the first design', and 'Additionally' helps guide the reader through the comparison. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'same applicable to staff dinning rooms'. The referencing is generally clear, though the transition between the description of new structures and the unchanged areas could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, the overview, and the detailed body of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. The word 'apartments' is misused to refer to rooms or sections of a cafe, which significantly impacts the professional tone. Other choices, such as 'erected' for indoor structures, are slightly unnatural in this context. While the student successfully uses terms like 'renovation', 'redesigned', and 'partitions', the overall lexical control is limited. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using vocabulary that is specific to architectural or floor-plan descriptions, such as 'facilities', 'zones', or 'designated areas'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The below schematic diagrams illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'same applicable to staff dinning rooms' (missing verb/article). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is sometimes clunky. While the errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to indicate a lack of control over complex grammatical forms. More attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would improve the accuracy of the writing.

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